I liked:
Quote:
I want to meet her today
an alibi for my sins
riding shotgun on my hell-bound
life
keeping me on track along the way
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And hated:
Quote:
She's shy and self-conscious
not ready to come out
but I'll sit her down and say
we've got a lot to talk about
I won't give up
I won't stop
dreaming
waiting
for her to walk
into my life
she's all I'm thinking
about she makes me feel
alright
she will complete me
make me happy
I will see her
make it snappy
before she gets away
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If your turning this into a song, replacing that with a chorus would be good. Overall though it wasn't that bad.
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