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~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ · 01-06-2009, 08:38 PM

your poems are not depressing they are just bad

empty cup · 01-06-2009, 09:07 PM

please know, i am no song writer, i am no poet, i am but nothing -- so take that in consideration before you tell me how much i suck

and then let me have it even more

here's my take on this:

don't look at the clock
nothing can move there is no time
pounding cold won't calm my soul
at the window again
at the window again

{chorus}
who am i if i can't sleep
if i can't dream
if you won't come close to open me
who am i if i can't sleep
if i can't dream
if you won't speak to silence me

i'll create my world of false security
rain rain rainbows at midnight

don't look at the clock
my fears collide too much to kill
lay down all hope all possibility
boredom slowing burning me
boredom slowing burning me

{chorus}

i'll create my world of false serenity
rain rain rainbows at midnight

i toss i turn i can't calm it down
can't keep wishing you were coming 'round
if you could care even enough to punish me
if i had something left i'd let you break it back inside of me
inside of me to die

{chorus}

i'll create my world of false identity
rain rain rainbows at midnight

i toss i turn i can't calm it down
can't keep wishing you were coming 'round
if you could care even enough to humor me
if i had something left i'd let you break it back inside of me
inside of me to strive

sleepy jack · 01-06-2009, 11:54 PM

No you're wrong. They're depressingly bad.

Rubber · 01-07-2009, 12:02 AM

construktive? wuts that lol

~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ · 01-07-2009, 12:14 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Rubber

construktive? wuts that lol

Arya Stark · 01-07-2009, 11:53 AM

Sigh, I suppose it will occur sooner or later...

Arya Stark · 01-12-2009, 09:09 PM

I like this one a lot better than the other one. It's more poetic.

Although I don't feel I've the right to criticize someone who is so much like myself.

But it is very good.

aveneficus · 01-13-2009, 02:22 PM

Best Part:

Quote:

You are my life's ambition
and I've been waiting for you to
save me from myself come on
there's no admission
we're both on our way to hell

especially the last line, excellent

Awful Part

:

Quote:

she will complete me
make me happy
I will see her
make it snappy
before she gets away

make it snappy??
I cringed.. yikes!

Arya Stark · 01-13-2009, 05:12 PM

True. =P

Making it snappy is very... cartoon like.

deep_and_depressing · 01-13-2009, 08:09 PM

ya that one sucked I hate it but i didn't know what else to put there

01-06-2009, 09:07 PM	#32 (permalink)
empty cup Groupie Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 5	please know, i am no song writer, i am no poet, i am but nothing -- so take that in consideration before you tell me how much i suck and then let me have it even more here's my take on this: don't look at the clock nothing can move there is no time pounding cold won't calm my soul at the window again at the window again {chorus} who am i if i can't sleep if i can't dream if you won't come close to open me who am i if i can't sleep if i can't dream if you won't speak to silence me i'll create my world of false security rain rain rainbows at midnight don't look at the clock my fears collide too much to kill lay down all hope all possibility boredom slowing burning me boredom slowing burning me {chorus} i'll create my world of false serenity rain rain rainbows at midnight i toss i turn i can't calm it down can't keep wishing you were coming 'round if you could care even enough to punish me if i had something left i'd let you break it back inside of me inside of me to die {chorus} i'll create my world of false identity rain rain rainbows at midnight i toss i turn i can't calm it down can't keep wishing you were coming 'round if you could care even enough to humor me if i had something left i'd let you break it back inside of me inside of me to strive __________________ please disregard any attempt at sensical expression on my behalf . . . i a merely seeking some semblance of collective effervesence among my many selves . . . emptiness in a warm cup . . . sip sip oh yeah . . .

01-07-2009, 12:02 AM	#34 (permalink)
Rubber sidewalks Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: Novi Posts: 401	construktive? wuts that lol __________________ and we stayed, sixteen.

01-13-2009, 08:09 PM	#40 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	ya that one sucked I hate it but i didn't know what else to put there __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

01-06-2009, 08:38 PM	#31 (permalink)
~~CAPTAIN CAVEMAN~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: VAN Posts: 2,530	your poems are not depressing they are just bad

01-07-2009, 11:53 AM	#36 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	Sigh, I suppose it will occur sooner or later...

01-12-2009, 09:09 PM	#37 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	I like this one a lot better than the other one. It's more poetic. Although I don't feel I've the right to criticize someone who is so much like myself. But it is very good.

01-13-2009, 05:12 PM	#39 (permalink)
Arya Stark "Hermione-Lite" Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: New York. Posts: 3,084	True. =P Making it snappy is very... cartoon like.