stuck (music and lyrics, punk, goth, quote, song)

deep_and_depressing · 01-13-2009, 07:16 PM

HOLY S*** I'M JEALOUS!!! I can't use the original anymore... I've been beat... I have no talent anyways oh well.

deep_and_depressing · 03-09-2009, 08:51 AM

I wrote this about darkcornerinthecloset, as I usually do. I haven't edited at all so it pretty much sucks so far.
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Just Thought You Should Know

Come up from behind wrap my
arms around you.
Check to see that no
harm has found you.
I'm here to protect,
forgive and forget.
Put my life on the line for you.

[chorus]
Please hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I need you more than ever so,
just hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I love you.
Just thought you should know.

I want to make you happy,
see the light in your eyes.
Brighten your world to
neon colors that surprise.
I just want to hear that your mine.
Because I'll be here for you
until the end of time.

[chorus]

I find it hard to believe,
that someone so angelic
could ever want me.
You're committment-phobic,
but I can see,
somwhere deep inside you'll
always love me.

Please hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I want you more than I should so,
baby hold me tighter,
don't ever let go.
I love you.
But you already know.

[chorus]
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The chorus sounds like something "We The Kings" would write. (Random observations)

7gaugejames · 03-09-2009, 09:22 AM

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww, that's sweet,

dark corner needs someone on their side like that.

I like the song,

I made it a punk song in my head, with a heavy english accent, like I would imagine Jackhammer having.

deep_and_depressing · 03-11-2009, 09:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 7gaugejames

Awwwwwwwwwwwwww, that's sweet,

dark corner needs someone on their side like that.

I like the song,

HOLY SH!T did you seriously just compliment MY song?????!!! that NEVER happens!!!!! (thanks)

Freebase Dali · 03-11-2009, 06:53 PM

I think I just witnessed internet rape.

deep_and_depressing · 03-11-2009, 09:24 AM

I just wanna say: I have some of the weirdest phobias EVER.
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Everyone has a phobia.
Everyone is scared.
And many of these little frights
make us
happiness impaired.

For many it can be
spiders,
heights,
or even blood,
that keep them from doing
the things they love.

Our phobias are different
from the rest.
But have we ever tried to fight them?
Tried to put them to the test?

Will you keep living hopeless lies,
and still be afraid to feel?
Will I keep hiding from the light,
and things that I know aren't real?

Will we ever stand up to these
nightmares that we have?
Or will we keep on being different
and pretend it makes us sad?

Freebase Dali · 03-11-2009, 06:51 PM

I like the concept, but it feels like you just wrote a rhyme for children.
Maybe you could work on your delivery?
I dunno, just an idea.

PinkCigarette · 03-18-2009, 01:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Veridical Fiction

I like the concept, but it feels like you just wrote a rhyme for children.
Maybe you could work on your delivery?
I dunno, just an idea.

I got that sense, too, but a lot of kids have a lot of fears, many of which they grow out of, so it would make sense.

darkcornerinthecloset · 03-12-2009, 02:37 PM

If you are afraid of shadows why do you say you hide from light?

deep_and_depressing · 03-13-2009, 08:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by darkcornerinthecloset

If you are afraid of shadows why do you say you hide from light?

The combination of light and solid objects creates shadows.

01-13-2009, 07:16 PM	#1 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	HOLY S*** I'M JEALOUS!!! I can't use the original anymore... I've been beat... I have no talent anyways oh well. __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

03-09-2009, 08:51 AM	#2 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	Just Thought You Should Know I wrote this about darkcornerinthecloset, as I usually do. I haven't edited at all so it pretty much sucks so far. -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Just Thought You Should Know Come up from behind wrap my arms around you. Check to see that no harm has found you. I'm here to protect, forgive and forget. Put my life on the line for you. [chorus] Please hold me tighter, don't ever let go. I need you more than ever so, just hold me tighter, don't ever let go. I love you. Just thought you should know. I want to make you happy, see the light in your eyes. Brighten your world to neon colors that surprise. I just want to hear that your mine. Because I'll be here for you until the end of time. [chorus] I find it hard to believe, that someone so angelic could ever want me. You're committment-phobic, but I can see, somwhere deep inside you'll always love me. Please hold me tighter, don't ever let go. I want you more than I should so, baby hold me tighter, don't ever let go. I love you. But you already know. [chorus] -------------------------------------------------------------------------- The chorus sounds like something "We The Kings" would write. (Random observations) __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

03-09-2009, 09:22 AM	#3 (permalink)
7gaugejames Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Imperial Beach Ca. Posts: 101	Just thought you should know; as follows, Awwwwwwwwwwwwww, that's sweet, dark corner needs someone on their side like that. I like the song, I made it a punk song in my head, with a heavy english accent, like I would imagine Jackhammer having. __________________ I don't care who you are, Gunslinger, shmunslinger, everyone needs a good purse.

03-11-2009, 09:24 AM	#6 (permalink)
deep_and_depressing Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2008 Posts: 73	Phobias I just wanna say: I have some of the weirdest phobias EVER. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- Everyone has a phobia. Everyone is scared. And many of these little frights make us happiness impaired. For many it can be spiders, heights, or even blood, that keep them from doing the things they love. Our phobias are different from the rest. But have we ever tried to fight them? Tried to put them to the test? Will you keep living hopeless lies, and still be afraid to feel? Will I keep hiding from the light, and things that I know aren't real? Will we ever stand up to these nightmares that we have? Or will we keep on being different and pretend it makes us sad? __________________ My life was like a fairytale . . . Except I left Mr. Charming for his sister

03-11-2009, 06:53 PM	#5 (permalink)
Freebase Dali Partying on the inside Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 5,584	I think I just witnessed internet rape.

03-11-2009, 06:51 PM	#7 (permalink)
Freebase Dali Partying on the inside Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 5,584	I like the concept, but it feels like you just wrote a rhyme for children. Maybe you could work on your delivery? I dunno, just an idea.

03-12-2009, 02:37 PM	#9 (permalink)
darkcornerinthecloset Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Rochester, NY Posts: 160	If you are afraid of shadows why do you say you hide from light?