I'm Over You (rap, rock, The Police, title, review)

Bazerk_Gorilla · 09-04-2005, 12:47 PM

Sup guys this is my first complete rap song... figured i'd post it to see what you guys think.

Song Title: I'm Over You
Artist: Bazerk AKA me

Yo what happened to the days where nothing mattered but love.
It seemed like you were an angel dropped from way up above.
I treated you like princess and you know it’s true.
Now thinking about you is enough to make me blue.

I gave you my heart, my love, and my trust.
You’re the one who ****ed it all up!
Why should I care what the **** you think about me?
You’ve turned into nothing but an incurable disease.

Who was the one that was there during your court case?
Hell after all I done for you all I got was a slap in the face!
If I knew you were gonna use me I would have spent my money on yugioh.
Instead I ended up wasting it on a dirty ho.

Go ahead cry to your mom, dad, uncle and aunt!
It’ll be nothing more than your same ****ing rant!
Go ahead and call your boy, Call your piece of trash...
Bitch I’ll wipe everything out with a tidal wave splash!

Chorus

You be the one on your knees crawlin.
You be the one on your knees bawlin
You be the one expecting me to have pity for you...
But you know what bitch? I'm Over you!

It’s your loss and my gain.
It’s obvious that being a slut is your hall of fame.
But hey while your sucking off a red neck trucker
I be looking for a new bitch mother ****er.

I should have listened to my friend Ced.
He told me you were a slut giving cheap head
Go ahead think I’m a crazy Psycho.
I’d rather be that than a bitch ass ho.

I got enough fuel on you to start an arson fire.
I will reveal to the world that you are nothing but a liar.
You can’t tell the difference between trash and treasure.
Bitch please your wanting me back using any desperate measure.

You did nothing but play with my heart.
You absolutely ripped my mind apart.
Bitch you got more stories than a pedophile.
Hell you got fingered more than a phone dial.

Chorus

After all the places I have taken you…
The thanks I get is me getting pounced on by your crew.
After all the phone calls at all hours of the night…
Like a great explorer once said. I HAVE NOT YET BEGUN TO FIGHT!

What happened to the promise we agreed on?
You hurt me so bad you hit me with a bomb.
You made me almost end my life for good.
Close to meeting the Grim Reaper with his Black Hood.

Thinking about me I hope you’re crying all day.
Bitch you look like a Harlot outside of a Cabaret.
Hell you even claim that I was an abuser.
Regrets is all I feel since you are about the size of a PT Cruiser.

You even had the nerve to diss my trade mark.
Bitch your so ugly Satan would cry even if it was dark.
Hell I am like Juggernaut from the X-Men.
You are like someone at the age of 10!

Chorus

Your personality was as fake as your chest.
You claim that you were better than the rest.
You said we were going to stay together for awhile.
I’m sorry but I don’t want Flannel cramping my style!

You may think that I am jealous of what you got.
Hell I ain’t jealous of anything you were taught.
You even have parents that don’t even care…
I’m thankful I don’t have a mom that looks like a Grizzly Bear.

Thanks to you I now have the heart of a Champ.
You can just go back to your hooker camp.
Go call the police, Get your dad on the phone.
Bitch try calling me you won’t even get a ring tone.

I gave you chance after chance and you ****ed 7 different guys.
Let me ask you this… Have you ever even looked in my eyes?!
Go ahead call me names, tell me I’m immature…
Bitch I don’t care cuz I am The Hawaiian Shirt Wearing Freak Of Nature!

Chorus x2

TheBig3 · 09-04-2005, 02:53 PM

I don't know about the others, but im reluctant to reply on someone with a low post count, makes it seem like they came here for the review and thats it.

While that seems fine, this forum is sorta give and take, and other would want their stuff reviewed.

riseagainstrocks · 09-05-2005, 09:30 AM

"I gave you chance after chance and you ****ed 7 different guys.
Let me ask you this… Have you ever even looked in my eyes?!
Go ahead call me names, tell me I’m immature…
Bitch I don’t care cuz I am The Hawaiian Shirt Wearing Freak Of Nature"

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

that is my review of that line. the rest is similar

Urban Hat€monger ? · 09-05-2005, 09:32 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by riseagainstrocks

"I gave you chance after chance and you ****ed 7 different guys.
Let me ask you this… Have you ever even looked in my eyes?!
Go ahead call me names, tell me I’m immature…
Bitch I don’t care cuz I am The Hawaiian Shirt Wearing Freak Of Nature"

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

that is my review of that line. the rest is similar

Thank you for pulling out that gem so I didn`t have to read the whole thing

sleepy jack · 09-05-2005, 03:27 PM

This is kinda of like poop.

Ya know shitty.

Seriously crappy medaphors and it was all the same.

EDGE · 09-05-2005, 04:21 PM

"But hey while your sucking off a red neck trucker, I be looking for a new bitch mother ****er."

That's class.

TheBig3 · 09-05-2005, 08:12 PM

Ok I tlaked to this guy after my post. He's got a ways to go without question, but you're not exactly helping with comments like this. Perhaps explain wy you don't like it. You know who im talking to...all of you.

EDGE · 09-06-2005, 05:04 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TheBig3KilledMyRainDog

Perhaps explain wy you don't like it.

Perhaps it's awful.

TheBig3 · 09-06-2005, 05:57 PM

Arrogance

Spike*Spiegel · 09-09-2005, 12:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by EDGE

Perhaps it's awful.

alright then, YOU write something better, if you think you know so much.

09-04-2005, 12:47 PM	#1 (permalink)
Bazerk_Gorilla Groupie Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 1	I'm Over You Sup guys this is my first complete rap song... figured i'd post it to see what you guys think. Song Title: I'm Over You Artist: Bazerk AKA me Yo what happened to the days where nothing mattered but love. It seemed like you were an angel dropped from way up above. I treated you like princess and you know it’s true. Now thinking about you is enough to make me blue. I gave you my heart, my love, and my trust. You’re the one who **ed it all up! Why should I care what the you think about me? You’ve turned into nothing but an incurable disease. Who was the one that was there during your court case? Hell after all I done for you all I got was a slap in the face! If I knew you were gonna use me I would have spent my money on yugioh. Instead I ended up wasting it on a dirty ho. Go ahead cry to your mom, dad, uncle and aunt! It’ll be nothing more than your same ing rant! Go ahead and call your boy, Call your piece of trash... Bitch I’ll wipe everything out with a tidal wave splash! Chorus You be the one on your knees crawlin. You be the one on your knees bawlin You be the one expecting me to have pity for you... But you know what bitch? I'm Over you! It’s your loss and my gain. It’s obvious that being a slut is your hall of fame. But hey while your sucking off a red neck trucker I be looking for a new bitch mother er. I should have listened to my friend Ced. He told me you were a slut giving cheap head Go ahead think I’m a crazy Psycho. I’d rather be that than a bitch ass ho. I got enough fuel on you to start an arson fire. I will reveal to the world that you are nothing but a liar. You can’t tell the difference between trash and treasure. Bitch please your wanting me back using any desperate measure. You did nothing but play with my heart. You absolutely ripped my mind apart. Bitch you got more stories than a pedophile. Hell you got fingered more than a phone dial. Chorus After all the places I have taken you… The thanks I get is me getting pounced on by your crew. After all the phone calls at all hours of the night… Like a great explorer once said. I HAVE NOT YET BEGUN TO FIGHT! What happened to the promise we agreed on? You hurt me so bad you hit me with a bomb. You made me almost end my life for good. Close to meeting the Grim Reaper with his Black Hood. Thinking about me I hope you’re crying all day. Bitch you look like a Harlot outside of a Cabaret. Hell you even claim that I was an abuser. Regrets is all I feel since you are about the size of a PT Cruiser. You even had the nerve to diss my trade mark. Bitch your so ugly Satan would cry even if it was dark. Hell I am like Juggernaut from the X-Men. You are like someone at the age of 10! Chorus Your personality was as fake as your chest. You claim that you were better than the rest. You said we were going to stay together for awhile. I’m sorry but I don’t want Flannel cramping my style! You may think that I am jealous of what you got. Hell I ain’t jealous of anything you were taught. You even have parents that don’t even care… I’m thankful I don’t have a mom that looks like a Grizzly Bear. Thanks to you I now have the heart of a Champ. You can just go back to your hooker camp. Go call the police, Get your dad on the phone. Bitch try calling me you won’t even get a ring tone. I gave you chance after chance and you **ed 7 different guys. Let me ask you this… Have you ever even looked in my eyes?! Go ahead call me names, tell me I’m immature… Bitch I don’t care cuz I am The Hawaiian Shirt Wearing Freak Of Nature! Chorus x2

09-04-2005, 02:53 PM	#2 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	I don't know about the others, but im reluctant to reply on someone with a low post count, makes it seem like they came here for the review and thats it. While that seems fine, this forum is sorta give and take, and other would want their stuff reviewed. __________________ I've moved to a new address

09-05-2005, 09:30 AM	#3 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	"I gave you chance after chance and you ****ed 7 different guys. Let me ask you this… Have you ever even looked in my eyes?! Go ahead call me names, tell me I’m immature… Bitch I don’t care cuz I am The Hawaiian Shirt Wearing Freak Of Nature" HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA that is my review of that line. the rest is similar __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

09-05-2005, 08:12 PM	#7 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Ok I tlaked to this guy after my post. He's got a ways to go without question, but you're not exactly helping with comments like this. Perhaps explain wy you don't like it. You know who im talking to...all of you. __________________ I've moved to a new address

09-06-2005, 05:57 PM	#9 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Arrogance __________________ I've moved to a new address

09-05-2005, 04:21 PM	#6 (permalink)
EDGE accidental genius Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Boston, MA Posts: 1,161	"But hey while your sucking off a red neck trucker, I be looking for a new bitch mother ****er." That's class.