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09-09-2005, 07:12 AM | #12 (permalink) |
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Ya know what bitch? Im ova you!
Haha
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09-09-2005, 07:40 AM | #13 (permalink) |
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Oh. Oh, Renee!
Tell everyone about jessica and the "weeeeeeeeeeeed"!
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09-14-2005, 05:10 PM | #15 (permalink) |
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it takes alot of balls to post something here, you cna't just go around smashing peopls fragile ego about their own work. Its always been said that the best writers have the thinnest skin.
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09-15-2005, 06:09 PM | #16 (permalink) |
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in this instance however, it's like teaching a mule to speak. dependant on the age of whoever this was, they need to A) mature (much of my early writing was forced rhymes and such) or B) choose a different style. It is hard to write a good rap song (not gangsta rap, but a real rap. like Mr. Lif or Aesop Rock).
Bezerk, ease up on the rhyming and the overly brutal hatred towards this whore. Unless you want to join Korn most of your "rhymes" will never work. at all. try and be more indistinct or have some sort of metaphor. Straight forward works sometimes but not now.
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09-28-2005, 10:53 PM | #19 (permalink) | ||
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and my personal favorite, right before he insulted said girl by calling her a ten year old: Quote:
seriously kid, it's great if writing relieves stress or helps you get things off your chest, but if you want to write quality lyrics, try for a more sophisticated set of metaphors instead of just writing down the first set of words that come to your head.
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