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Groupie
Join Date: Dec 2021
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Hey everyone Im new to this site...but I was hoping you all could give some input on this song I am writing to sing to my boyfriend. Heres what I have so far let me know what you all think and please give any feedback if you have any!!!
I fell in love with a guy who makes me feel happy with who i am he held my hand in the dark and walked me through hard times i never thought id find a love like this but then i met you and you changed my whole world for the better and now... im chasin for the stars and im followin my heart and its all because he gave me hope yea i never thought id find hope again but then you pushed me through and never let me go and now ive fallen in love with you with all my heart and soul yea ive fallen in love with you with all my heart and soul Thats all I have on the song for right now let me know what you all think!!! |
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Go ahead, Mr. Wendal
Join Date: May 2021
Location: Paris, France
Posts: 1,012
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it's pretty nice
Especially the second part - it gets less cliche and more like an actual song. Also, midway through you have a nice rhythm in the words. What I mean by that is that the beginning is a bit sloppy ryhtmically, but around the phrase "But then I met you" you sort it out, and I even began bouncing my head while reading I think you should consider choosing between the talking directly at him and talking about him |
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