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We went back there and they had come and hacked off every inoculated arm. There they were in a pile. A pile of little arms. And I remember... I... I... I cried. I wept like some grandmother. I wanted to tear my teeth out. I didn't know what I wanted to do. And I want to remember it. I never want to forget it. I never want to forget. And then I realized... like I was shot... like I was shot with a diamond... a diamond bullet right through my forehead. And I thought: My God... the genius of that.

DontRunMeOver

Hi Death. I took the time to actually read all of lyrics and have to say that 'Left', 'RIP you' and 'Scream' really didn't read well on their own, 'Lost' was much better. The main difference seemed to be that Lost came across as more of a conversation with another person (well it was a series of directions really) which meant that the reader's a bit more able to get involved with the words. It was more like you were saying that the reader themselves was the character in the lyric, not the singer. The other songs just came across as somebody shouting about themselves in an inarticulate way, so that it was difficult to see what the lyricist was talking about and no incentive was given for the reader/listener to try to understand what the lyricist was saying.

If you want people to be interested in your lyrics then you should first think about WHY they would be interested in the first place and what they would get from it.

Hope that helps.