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06-29-2020, 02:09 PM | #1 (permalink) |
Groupie
Join Date: Jun 2020
Posts: 2
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I'm trying to write music and I was hoping to get feedback on a song.
SW33T TALK3R:
cause your a sweet talker and I'm so gullible I fell for you and I got ****ed up when you're around I cant feel myself you're my cocaine and i am the weekend I wish I could get away from this **** I wish could get away from this bitch But she smiles and I'm back on my knees and I cant leave cause I am addicted to your kisses I know your ruining my life but i cant leave cause you're my one vice you're like opium and i am the user say that i love you call me a loser i wish could do the same but i am a user you kiss my and it gets me so high i wish that you would ****ing die i just want you out of my life cause you were a sweet talker and I was so gullible I fell for you and I got ****ed up when you were around I couldn't feel myself you were my cocaine and i was the weekend I wished I could get away from that **** I wished could get away from you bitch But you smiled and I was back on my knees and I can leave cause I am no longer addicted to your love or to your kisses I know your ruining my life so I'm leaving not gonna think twice you were my one vice but i found another yeah I ****ing love her she makes me love myself you made me feel like I was the bad guy i just wanted to have your time but you gave it to another guy you gave yours to my best friend and give mine to yours and I told you right then four friends one castle it wouldn't end well but look I'm smiling harder than i ever have before and he's about to leave you for another whore well im not talking to you anymore cause you were a sweet talker and I was so gullible I fell for you and I got ****ed up when you were around I couldn't feel myself you were my cocaine and i was the weekend I wished I could get away from that **** I wished could get away from you bitch But you smiled and I was back on my knees and I can leave cause I am no longer addicted to your love or to your kisses I know your ruining my life so I'm leaving not gonna think twice you were my one vice Yeah I know its not the best but its a rather new song and I'm still refining it. im also rather new to song making and so my skills are rather poor but aye you know how it is. this song was written to this beat ([FREE] Pop Punk, Smrtdeath, 2000s Type Beat "Sweetalker" prod. yunny goldz) sorry about no link i cant post them yet |
06-29-2020, 02:29 PM | #2 (permalink) |
one-balled nipple jockey
Join Date: Dec 2010
Location: Dirty Souf Biatch
Posts: 22,006
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Make it end in a suicide with a quizzical it’s better to have loved and lost message
to your love or to your kisses and then only unfulfilled wishes I know youre ruining my life I'm leaving on a train that is destined to wreck by tying the noose that will bruise up my neck snap and I’m done not gonna think twice I lost and death won but you... you were my only... sweet lovely vice
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