Are these lyrics any good?

Angel3010 · 12-31-2015, 06:04 AM

Hello, I'm a new member here. I might do a song for youtube one day but I would first like to see if you guys like my lyrics. And english isn't my first language so sorry about grammar.

WOLF:

One sunrise left to see
Are we happy now, are we?
One mountain left to conquer
The only place I admire
One fear left to defeat
So we feel our hearthbeat
Life was a stranger
We always lived on the edge looking for a danger
We've seen the world
While watching endless sky
We thought we could fly

Deep inside there is a monster sleeping
Frozen in time while weeping
But when it wakes up rage will appear
Raaage!!!!
It will burn down anything
Raaage!!!!
It will burn down anything
We'll go crazy yeaaaaaaa
Like a wolf x4

One sunset left to see
Are we saisfied now are we?
One cry from stranger left to ignore
They keep asking for more
One man left to burry
And then run away in hurry
We aimed for stars
But dark clouds shaded us
We got lost in reality
Dreamed impossible dream

Deep inside there is a monster sleeping
Frozen in time while weeping
But when it wakes up rage will appear
Raaage!!!!
It will burn down anything
Raaage!!!!
It will burn down anything
We'll go crazy yeaaaaaaa
Like a wolf x4

Is that you crying?
Have you lost the battle yet?
Oooooh! Ooooh!
Where am I?
Where is justice?
Those are questions I don't know
And I never will
I lost right direction
And now I'm here lonely
Like a wolf x4

NIGHTMARE:

Big cities are built in a day
Oh all that places I've never seen
And yet I feel like I'm home
I feel free like a bird
Happy faces of people I've met
But can't tell where
I keep seeing her
Everywhere I look, everywhere I go
It can't fade
It won't fade

But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down
I can't tell if it's true or not
Am I dreaming for too long?
Is it a dream or reality?
Did I forget to wake up?

Grey cities are built in a day
Oh all that places I keep seeing
And yet they are strange to me
I feel locked like in a jail
Faces full of despair
But I can't tell why
I wish I felt something
But I feel nothing
It can't fade
It won't fade

But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down
I can't tell if it's true or not
Am I dreaming for too long?
Is it a nightmare or reality?
Did I forget to wake up?

I'm lost in my own dreams
They only thing I have
Maybe I forgot to wake up
Or maybe I don't want to
Is it a nightmare or dream?
I can't say anymore
But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down

BRIDGE:

As I'm walking on the bridge
I see memories floating down the river
I see pictures of my past
Floating down the river
But I'm standing on the bridge safe
On the bridge I made myself
It keeps me from falling
Into abyss of oblivion
That bridge binds my memories
Keeps them close to me

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

River can't be tamed
It will wash away everything that falls in
It just won't stop running
Oblivion won't forgive
So I'm standing here on the bridge
Watching wild river
We're just flash in time
But some things last for centuries
Try to stay still in the river
Like a stone

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

I wanna make memories I know will never fade
Because at the end
What have we got left
But our memories?

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

GREY ROUTINE

Waking up
Getting up
Making coffe
Eating breakfast
Brushing teeth
Getting dressed
Going out

As I'm driveing through the maze of grey buildings
I'm listening to the radio
Traffic is huge
Traffic lights are grey
All I see is grey
Grey sky is weeping
Cleaning soul of the city
People are in hurry to get nowhere
They are starring at their phones

All I see is grey, grey grey
Routine is killing me
Everything repeats over and over
I'm waiting for colours to shine me

x3

ON THE FLOOR:

Lying on the floor
Looking up above
I imagine how does sky look like
Chained to the past
Unable to move
I imagine how does sky look like

And when night falls
I hear desperate calls
Of ones I used to know
Heroes that I saw

(chorus)
Dancing on the floor
Wanting more and more
Embrace shadows
Standing all alone
Stage is gone
Embrace shadows
Dancing on the floor
Losing more and more

Faking all the joy
Dreaming all the time
I imagine how does sky look like
Locked in a room
Wrongly understood
I imagine how does sky look like

Like puppet on the strings
With broken wings
I look for better days
On unexplored ways

(chorus x2)
Dancing on the floor
Wanting more and more
Embrace shadows
Standing all alone
Stage is gone
Embrace shadows
Dancing on the floor
Losing more and more

~~susu~~ · 01-02-2016, 03:47 PM

English is not my first language, either. So I read your lyrics several times. Then I can understand some, not too many. When I read this:
Where am I?
Where is justice?
Those are questions I don't know
And I never will
I lost right direction
And now I'm here lonely
Like a wolf x4

It reminds me of my life several years ago. I lost my right direction and I didn't know whom I can rely on, lived hopelessly. Fortunately, now I find the path of human life and lead a happy life.

I think your lyrics can cause some people's resonance. Because your lyrics expresses the same heart voice of some people.

Angel3010 · 01-03-2016, 04:47 AM

Hey, your english is rather good

I'm glad you are better now.
And thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.

~~susu~~ · 01-04-2016, 03:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Angel3010

Hey, your english is rather good

I'm glad you are better now.
And thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.

Thanks. You are the first one to say that my English is rather good. English is not my first language. I just graduated from Senior high school and I didn't go to university. I learn english by myself. I often watch english films and listen to English recitations for studying English. Share a good english recitation with you:http://www.holyspiritspeaks.org/vide...-of-mans-life/

May you write more good lyrics. And may you be a successful musician in the future.

Angel3010 · 01-06-2016, 07:20 AM

Nice site, it is helpful
Thanks a lot

Angel3010 · 01-12-2016, 04:59 AM

I wrote a new song called nightmare. Movie called Inception inspired me and I recomand you to watch it. Tell me your thoughts.

Big cities are built in a day
Oh all that places I've never seen
And yet I feel like I'm home
I feel free like a bird
Happy faces of people I've met
But can't tell where
I keep seeing her
Everywhere I look, everywhere I go
It can't fade
It won't fade

But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down
I can't tell if it's true or not
Am I dreaming for too long?
Is it a dream or reality?
Did I forget to wake up?

Grey cities are built in a day
Oh all that places I keep seeing
And yet they are strange to me
I feel locked like in a jail
Faces full of despair
But I can't tell why
I wish I felt something
But I feel nothing
It can't fade
It won't fade

But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down
I can't tell if it's true or not
Am I dreaming for too long?
Is it a nightmare or reality?
Did I forget to wake up?

I'm lost in my own dreams
They only thing I have
Maybe I forgot to wake up
Or maybe I don't want to
Is it a nightmare or dream?
I can't say anymore
But when mist appears
Everything starts crushing down

Angel3010 · 01-14-2016, 01:57 PM

c'mon guys, anybody? no thoughts?

mr.mick · 01-18-2016, 07:29 PM

they sound good. and remember, lyrics always (nearly) seem better when they're sung

Angel3010 · 01-19-2016, 08:09 AM

yeah, i know, but first i would like to see what people think about lyrics itself
at this moment, i'm just writing songs, i will probably write ten, and then, if i get a bit lucky i might record these songs
and thx for positive feedback

Angel3010 · 01-21-2016, 08:21 AM

New lyrics, this time about memories

BRIDGE

As I'm walking on the bridge
I see memories floating down the river
I see pictures of my past
Floating down the river
But I'm standing on the bridge safe
On the bridge I made myself
It keeps me from falling
Into abyss of oblivion
That bridge binds my memories
Keeps them close to me

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

River can't be tamed
It will wash away everything that falls in
It just won't stop running
Oblivion won't forgive
So I'm standing here on the bridge
Watching wild river
We're just flash in time
But some things last for centuries
Try to stay still in the river
Like a stone

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

I wanna make memories I know will never fade
Because at the end
What have we got left
But our memories?

Make them rich!
(memories)
Make them strong!
(memories)
Make the bridge
(memories)
Of a stone
(memories)
To keep them close to your heart

Thoughts?

12-31-2015, 06:04 AM	#1 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	Are these lyrics any good? Hello, I'm a new member here. I might do a song for youtube one day but I would first like to see if you guys like my lyrics. And english isn't my first language so sorry about grammar. WOLF: One sunrise left to see Are we happy now, are we? One mountain left to conquer The only place I admire One fear left to defeat So we feel our hearthbeat Life was a stranger We always lived on the edge looking for a danger We've seen the world While watching endless sky We thought we could fly Deep inside there is a monster sleeping Frozen in time while weeping But when it wakes up rage will appear Raaage!!!! It will burn down anything Raaage!!!! It will burn down anything We'll go crazy yeaaaaaaa Like a wolf x4 One sunset left to see Are we saisfied now are we? One cry from stranger left to ignore They keep asking for more One man left to burry And then run away in hurry We aimed for stars But dark clouds shaded us We got lost in reality Dreamed impossible dream Deep inside there is a monster sleeping Frozen in time while weeping But when it wakes up rage will appear Raaage!!!! It will burn down anything Raaage!!!! It will burn down anything We'll go crazy yeaaaaaaa Like a wolf x4 Is that you crying? Have you lost the battle yet? Oooooh! Ooooh! Where am I? Where is justice? Those are questions I don't know And I never will I lost right direction And now I'm here lonely Like a wolf x4 NIGHTMARE: Big cities are built in a day Oh all that places I've never seen And yet I feel like I'm home I feel free like a bird Happy faces of people I've met But can't tell where I keep seeing her Everywhere I look, everywhere I go It can't fade It won't fade But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down I can't tell if it's true or not Am I dreaming for too long? Is it a dream or reality? Did I forget to wake up? Grey cities are built in a day Oh all that places I keep seeing And yet they are strange to me I feel locked like in a jail Faces full of despair But I can't tell why I wish I felt something But I feel nothing It can't fade It won't fade But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down I can't tell if it's true or not Am I dreaming for too long? Is it a nightmare or reality? Did I forget to wake up? I'm lost in my own dreams They only thing I have Maybe I forgot to wake up Or maybe I don't want to Is it a nightmare or dream? I can't say anymore But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down BRIDGE: As I'm walking on the bridge I see memories floating down the river I see pictures of my past Floating down the river But I'm standing on the bridge safe On the bridge I made myself It keeps me from falling Into abyss of oblivion That bridge binds my memories Keeps them close to me Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart River can't be tamed It will wash away everything that falls in It just won't stop running Oblivion won't forgive So I'm standing here on the bridge Watching wild river We're just flash in time But some things last for centuries Try to stay still in the river Like a stone Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart I wanna make memories I know will never fade Because at the end What have we got left But our memories? Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart GREY ROUTINE Waking up Getting up Making coffe Eating breakfast Brushing teeth Getting dressed Going out As I'm driveing through the maze of grey buildings I'm listening to the radio Traffic is huge Traffic lights are grey All I see is grey Grey sky is weeping Cleaning soul of the city People are in hurry to get nowhere They are starring at their phones All I see is grey, grey grey Routine is killing me Everything repeats over and over I'm waiting for colours to shine me x3 ON THE FLOOR: Lying on the floor Looking up above I imagine how does sky look like Chained to the past Unable to move I imagine how does sky look like And when night falls I hear desperate calls Of ones I used to know Heroes that I saw (chorus) Dancing on the floor Wanting more and more Embrace shadows Standing all alone Stage is gone Embrace shadows Dancing on the floor Losing more and more Faking all the joy Dreaming all the time I imagine how does sky look like Locked in a room Wrongly understood I imagine how does sky look like Like puppet on the strings With broken wings I look for better days On unexplored ways (chorus x2) Dancing on the floor Wanting more and more Embrace shadows Standing all alone Stage is gone Embrace shadows Dancing on the floor Losing more and more Last edited by Angel3010; 04-11-2017 at 01:19 PM.

01-02-2016, 03:47 PM	#2 (permalink)
~~susu~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 43	English is not my first language, either. So I read your lyrics several times. Then I can understand some, not too many. When I read this: Where am I? Where is justice? Those are questions I don't know And I never will I lost right direction And now I'm here lonely Like a wolf x4 It reminds me of my life several years ago. I lost my right direction and I didn't know whom I can rely on, lived hopelessly. Fortunately, now I find the path of human life and lead a happy life. I think your lyrics can cause some people's resonance. Because your lyrics expresses the same heart voice of some people.

01-03-2016, 04:47 AM	#3 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	Hey, your english is rather good I'm glad you are better now. And thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.

01-06-2016, 07:20 AM	#5 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	Nice site, it is helpful Thanks a lot

01-12-2016, 04:59 AM	#6 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	I wrote a new song called nightmare. Movie called Inception inspired me and I recomand you to watch it. Tell me your thoughts. Big cities are built in a day Oh all that places I've never seen And yet I feel like I'm home I feel free like a bird Happy faces of people I've met But can't tell where I keep seeing her Everywhere I look, everywhere I go It can't fade It won't fade But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down I can't tell if it's true or not Am I dreaming for too long? Is it a dream or reality? Did I forget to wake up? Grey cities are built in a day Oh all that places I keep seeing And yet they are strange to me I feel locked like in a jail Faces full of despair But I can't tell why I wish I felt something But I feel nothing It can't fade It won't fade But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down I can't tell if it's true or not Am I dreaming for too long? Is it a nightmare or reality? Did I forget to wake up? I'm lost in my own dreams They only thing I have Maybe I forgot to wake up Or maybe I don't want to Is it a nightmare or dream? I can't say anymore But when mist appears Everything starts crushing down

01-14-2016, 01:57 PM	#7 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	c'mon guys, anybody? no thoughts?

01-18-2016, 07:29 PM	#8 (permalink)
mr.mick Groupie Join Date: Jan 2016 Posts: 6	they sound good. and remember, lyrics always (nearly) seem better when they're sung

01-19-2016, 08:09 AM	#9 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	yeah, i know, but first i would like to see what people think about lyrics itself at this moment, i'm just writing songs, i will probably write ten, and then, if i get a bit lucky i might record these songs and thx for positive feedback

01-21-2016, 08:21 AM	#10 (permalink)
Angel3010 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 39	New lyrics, this time about memories BRIDGE As I'm walking on the bridge I see memories floating down the river I see pictures of my past Floating down the river But I'm standing on the bridge safe On the bridge I made myself It keeps me from falling Into abyss of oblivion That bridge binds my memories Keeps them close to me Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart River can't be tamed It will wash away everything that falls in It just won't stop running Oblivion won't forgive So I'm standing here on the bridge Watching wild river We're just flash in time But some things last for centuries Try to stay still in the river Like a stone Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart I wanna make memories I know will never fade Because at the end What have we got left But our memories? Make them rich! (memories) Make them strong! (memories) Make the bridge (memories) Of a stone (memories) To keep them close to your heart Thoughts?