lost (performance, song)

little_dead_girl · 07-20-2005, 01:48 PM

Lost

Lost in herself

She could not find a way out.

All the lies she told, people she’d hurt.

No one could help her now.

Screaming, crying,

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow

She pleaded for help but no one, no one could save her

Not now, not after all that had happened.

She tried to run but it held her back

She tried to forget all that happened

She tried to be different

But something held her back

She was always the quiet one,

The innocent one, the happy one

On the outside

But on the inside just a lost girl

Trying to find her way out.

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow

And all was lost.

All was lost so she ran

She ran back, back to the life she had once abused

The life she hated.

But she lived it again

She brought more pain to herself

She had to,

To be noticed. To be loved

By someone, something she had always wanted

Always dreamed of, always reached out to

But could never catch.

This girl is lost, She needs a home

She pulled the knife out from under the pillow,

She screamed then found her home

This girl is dying

She has so much love but so much hate

She needs to get out she needs to find herself.

She tried to get help from hurting,

Hurting herself.

She thought it was the only way,

But she realised all she needed was someone,

Someone to hold her someone to love her,

She could not find anyone,

And it brought pain,

It brought tears to her eyes,

It brought her death…

(hi this is just a poem/song i wrote in one of my classes)

riseagainstrocks · 07-22-2005, 02:11 PM

you listen to the Used don't you.

go kill yourself. you talk about it enough.

little_dead_girl · 07-26-2005, 01:04 PM

that was kinda mean..........yea i listen to the used but the song has nothing to do with them.......and yea it's bout me bt i dont wanna kill myself it's just how i think i feel wel i duno.i cant reli explain it.

HuKitKat · 07-26-2005, 01:25 PM

you explained it quite well in the poem.
It's just you would feel weird if you said it plainly.
but dont kill yourself.
u a cutter?

little_dead_girl · 07-28-2005, 01:21 PM

wel i cut myself once b4 bt it wasnt much n i'm not palnning on doing it agen...unless things get reli bad

HuKitKat · 07-28-2005, 01:26 PM

dont really know much about cuttn, but i've seen a few documentaries on it.

but looking at your poem/song, you manage to use simple words to portray huge emotion and thats good in a writer. Many self-proclaimed poets nowadays think that by using every word in a thesaurus, they make great poetry, and that's not always the case.

cant really see it as a performance piece, but your skills are valuable. keep working!

Urban Hat€monger ? · 07-28-2005, 01:32 PM

Does anyone not write about things these days other than 'i hate myself whaaaaaaa whaaaaaa whaaaaaa'

Seriously , cut out all the self pity & actually have a go at trying to be creative.

ArtistInTheAmbulance · 07-28-2005, 02:38 PM

A lot of the writers are teens, therefore filled with teen angst and writing is basically a way to talk about it without actually having to talk. Also, getting comments on it from people you dont know probably helps.

HighHopes · 08-01-2005, 06:32 PM

That was ****.I'm sorry but it was.

07-20-2005, 01:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
little_dead_girl Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: not quite sure Posts: 16	lost Lost Lost in herself She could not find a way out. All the lies she told, people she’d hurt. No one could help her now. Screaming, crying, She pulled the knife out from under the pillow She pleaded for help but no one, no one could save her Not now, not after all that had happened. She tried to run but it held her back She tried to forget all that happened She tried to be different But something held her back She was always the quiet one, The innocent one, the happy one On the outside But on the inside just a lost girl Trying to find her way out. She pulled the knife out from under the pillow And all was lost. All was lost so she ran She ran back, back to the life she had once abused The life she hated. But she lived it again She brought more pain to herself She had to, To be noticed. To be loved By someone, something she had always wanted Always dreamed of, always reached out to But could never catch. This girl is lost, She needs a home She pulled the knife out from under the pillow, She screamed then found her home This girl is dying She has so much love but so much hate She needs to get out she needs to find herself. She tried to get help from hurting, Hurting herself. She thought it was the only way, But she realised all she needed was someone, Someone to hold her someone to love her, She could not find anyone, And it brought pain, It brought tears to her eyes, It brought her death… (hi this is just a poem/song i wrote in one of my classes)

07-22-2005, 02:11 PM	#2 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	you listen to the Used don't you. go kill yourself. you talk about it enough. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

07-26-2005, 01:04 PM	#3 (permalink)
little_dead_girl Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: not quite sure Posts: 16	ye that was kinda mean..........yea i listen to the used but the song has nothing to do with them.......and yea it's bout me bt i dont wanna kill myself it's just how i think i feel wel i duno.i cant reli explain it.

07-26-2005, 01:25 PM	#4 (permalink)
HuKitKat Sucka 4 R&B Soul Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: VA Posts: 56	you explained it quite well in the poem. It's just you would feel weird if you said it plainly. but dont kill yourself. u a cutter? __________________ *Difficult takes a day, Impossible takes a week!*

07-28-2005, 01:21 PM	#5 (permalink)
little_dead_girl Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: not quite sure Posts: 16	... wel i cut myself once b4 bt it wasnt much n i'm not palnning on doing it agen...unless things get reli bad

07-28-2005, 01:26 PM	#6 (permalink)
HuKitKat Sucka 4 R&B Soul Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: VA Posts: 56	dont really know much about cuttn, but i've seen a few documentaries on it. but looking at your poem/song, you manage to use simple words to portray huge emotion and thats good in a writer. Many self-proclaimed poets nowadays think that by using every word in a thesaurus, they make great poetry, and that's not always the case. cant really see it as a performance piece, but your skills are valuable. keep working! __________________ *Difficult takes a day, Impossible takes a week!*

07-28-2005, 01:32 PM	#7 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	Does anyone not write about things these days other than 'i hate myself whaaaaaaa whaaaaaa whaaaaaa' Seriously , cut out all the self pity & actually have a go at trying to be creative. __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

07-28-2005, 02:38 PM	#8 (permalink)
ArtistInTheAmbulance enchanted. Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: cornwailles, angleterre. Posts: 2,537	A lot of the writers are teens, therefore filled with teen angst and writing is basically a way to talk about it without actually having to talk. Also, getting comments on it from people you dont know probably helps. __________________ shake your wings like theyre laced with sound!

08-01-2005, 06:32 PM	#9 (permalink)
HighHopes Groupie Join Date: Aug 2005 Posts: 4	That was ****.I'm sorry but it was.