Tell me what u think seriously please
 

She

She was a beautiful person to me
She was kind and caring
She always smiled when I’d see her
She would talk about all the things I loved

Little did she know I loved everything about her?
Little did she know I always talked about her?
Little by little I grew to love her more and more

If only I could see her now
If only I could remember her smile
If only I didn’t leave home
If only I had stayed and been with her

I wish I could turn back time
I want to come back home
I want her to be alive today

Why did she have to die?
Why was it so painful?
Why didn’t someone help her?
Why didn’t she live to see me today?

My life is not worth living
My life is not worth crying for
My life is so complicated
My life is incomplete without her

My life is not worth living
My life is not worth crying for
My life is so complicated
My life is incomplete without her

I'd say you truly meant every single word of this. If it's not too personal a question, is this based on personal experience?

It's really good. I personally think maybe you should use more rhyme? That's up to preference though. My favourite line is "If only I could remember her smile..." 'Tis beautiful...keep going. And comment on mine if you like?

Thats what it sounds like to me aswell.
Good though! :)

Good lyrics, very 'personal'.

its a little too..."kill yourself"ish for my taste....and its a little repetitve...the poetry of it is nice though.

it's not actually based on an experience, it just popped into my head and i wrote it down so

to me its repetitive and whiney, almost My chemical Romance isque


but keep truckin

thats what they all say..i bet she's hidden under the floorboards rite?

u could say that yes