Chief Of Police

Machine · 10-13-2014, 03:29 PM

With the stylish cover couples leaving us in awe
Plastic bins, filled with plastic crap sold to all
I'll just sit down and groan, whine
About all the things that are not mine
Cynicality is my friend with chains
And pessimism is my name
So when happiness rears its beautiful head
I'll shoot it down with my bullets

I am the chief of all the trees
In World War 3
But I'm not too tall
So they will kill me

Soft annihilation, we don't to hurt feelings
But I have to say if love to meet mine
And the moment that I do, I've only one thing to do
I would love to hurt its feelings back!
Because when I'm sad, I think I really am depressed
But man I blame my feelings for all of that
Everytime my feelings walk in a store I want to burn it down
Cause they see magazines with people who have sold their soul

So I will be the chief of police
In World War 3
But rioting is the easy way
I know they'll kill me
I know they'll kill me
I know they'll kill me
I know they'll kill me!!!

But then I'll know
Why our governments only targets the poor
And I will sing
A stinging thorn tree
So please don't cry
We all grow up and die
Or be chief of the things that really don't need it

And I will be the chief of me
In World War 3
And you would do the same
I hope you'd do the same
Oh please do the same!

Pet_Sounds · 10-13-2014, 09:53 PM

I think overall you need to pay attention to your phrasing and use more descriptive words. It feels choppy right now. Good concept, though, and I can imagine it set to music.

Machine · 10-13-2014, 09:57 PM

Thanks will do I'm still in a revising some of the lyrics and I'll try and I've already set it to music so I feel like if I change the words too much it won't fit which is what I'm worried about, but I'll see and post a revised version later. Thanks for the constructive criticism though

10-13-2014, 03:29 PM	#1 (permalink)
Machine moon lake inc. Join Date: Oct 2014 Location: Detroit Posts: 2,125	Chief Of Police With the stylish cover couples leaving us in awe Plastic bins, filled with plastic crap sold to all I'll just sit down and groan, whine About all the things that are not mine Cynicality is my friend with chains And pessimism is my name So when happiness rears its beautiful head I'll shoot it down with my bullets I am the chief of all the trees In World War 3 But I'm not too tall So they will kill me Soft annihilation, we don't to hurt feelings But I have to say if love to meet mine And the moment that I do, I've only one thing to do I would love to hurt its feelings back! Because when I'm sad, I think I really am depressed But man I blame my feelings for all of that Everytime my feelings walk in a store I want to burn it down Cause they see magazines with people who have sold their soul So I will be the chief of police In World War 3 But rioting is the easy way I know they'll kill me I know they'll kill me I know they'll kill me I know they'll kill me!!! But then I'll know Why our governments only targets the poor And I will sing A stinging thorn tree So please don't cry We all grow up and die Or be chief of the things that really don't need it And I will be the chief of me In World War 3 And you would do the same I hope you'd do the same Oh please do the same!

10-13-2014, 09:53 PM	#2 (permalink)
Pet_Sounds Remember the underscore Join Date: Feb 2014 Location: The other side Posts: 2,488	I think overall you need to pay attention to your phrasing and use more descriptive words. It feels choppy right now. Good concept, though, and I can imagine it set to music. __________________ Everybody's dying just to get the disease

10-13-2014, 09:57 PM	#3 (permalink)
Machine moon lake inc. Join Date: Oct 2014 Location: Detroit Posts: 2,125	Thanks will do I'm still in a revising some of the lyrics and I'll try and I've already set it to music so I feel like if I change the words too much it won't fit which is what I'm worried about, but I'll see and post a revised version later. Thanks for the constructive criticism though __________________ boost my ego listen to me stroke my delay pedal ever wanted to hear death grips songs... but they're acoustic? me neither.