Got Little Snippets. Need Advice. (lyrics, rock, member, songs)

BreakOut · 06-18-2005, 05:20 PM

It's just songs
from a movie
replayin' in my
head.

Instead of playin',
then stoppin',
it's going over & over
again.
--------
(that was one snippet.)
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It's cotton candy rock & rock
It's cotton candy mind control
It's cotton candy in our soul
And we don't care!
--------
(And that was the other)
--------
I'm trying to really decide if I want to combine the two into one song, or if I want to work them as separate. I've had a bit of experience with poetry, but not real much with lyrics.

Mind giving me advice?

BreakOut · 06-21-2005, 06:42 PM

Am I not going to go anything? No comments, no advice?

riseagainstrocks · 06-21-2005, 07:25 PM

Snippets are no good for critiquing. Write a song and I'd be happy to give advice

BreakOut · 06-21-2005, 09:04 PM

Thanks.

Jay2005 · 06-22-2005, 03:50 PM

Hello, I think that your snippets are somehow connected and I would say to combine them into one song if you can. They are a great start to a song. And just remember, keep writing those snippets, they are where every song begins, with a phrase or a catchy lyric! I hope this helps, please let me know when you have more written, I would really like to see the finished song. Thanks-

Jason

punkboy · 07-11-2005, 01:41 PM

I agree with Jay2005. The snippets are somewhat connected. However, cotton candy isnt something i'd be talking abvout but hey, its your song. Tell me how it turns out.

angel18 · 07-11-2005, 03:40 PM

keep writing down stuff that pops into ur head, it might just be that u put a song together and u don't know it

06-18-2005, 05:20 PM	#1 (permalink)
BreakOut Groupie Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 11	Got Little Snippets. Need Advice. It's just songs from a movie replayin' in my head. Instead of playin', then stoppin', it's going over & over again. -------- (that was one snippet.) -------- It's cotton candy rock & rock It's cotton candy mind control It's cotton candy in our soul And we don't care! -------- (And that was the other) -------- I'm trying to really decide if I want to combine the two into one song, or if I want to work them as separate. I've had a bit of experience with poetry, but not real much with lyrics. Mind giving me advice?

06-21-2005, 07:25 PM	#3 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	Snippets are no good for critiquing. Write a song and I'd be happy to give advice __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

06-22-2005, 03:50 PM	#5 (permalink)
Jay2005 Groupie Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 1	Snippets are where a song begins Hello, I think that your snippets are somehow connected and I would say to combine them into one song if you can. They are a great start to a song. And just remember, keep writing those snippets, they are where every song begins, with a phrase or a catchy lyric! I hope this helps, please let me know when you have more written, I would really like to see the finished song. Thanks- Jason

06-21-2005, 06:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
BreakOut Groupie Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 11	Am I not going to go anything? No comments, no advice?

06-21-2005, 09:04 PM	#4 (permalink)
BreakOut Groupie Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 11	Thanks.

07-11-2005, 01:41 PM	#6 (permalink)
punkboy Groupie Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 4	I agree with Jay2005. The snippets are somewhat connected. However, cotton candy isnt something i'd be talking abvout but hey, its your song. Tell me how it turns out.

07-11-2005, 03:40 PM	#7 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	keep writing down stuff that pops into ur head, it might just be that u put a song together and u don't know it