Powerstars

Are these any good for Rock lyrics:

Astronaut:
Looking down at space
So lovely...and frightening
Looking down at space
The tension is tightening

Chorus:

But I don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut...
Just wanted to get away
Just wanted to hear ya say
That you're proud

Staring down at space
Sometimes I just wanna die
Staring down at space
Sometimes I just wanna ask myself why
I went up into space
Left my family without a trace
I went up into space
Cuz I couldn't take you anymore!

Chorus:

I don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut...
Just wanted to get away
Just wanted to hear ya say
That you're proud

Falling down through space
Running out of air
Falling down through space
I highly doubt you care
Even though, I did this all for you
Now, you've really got me feeling blue
Cuz I did this all for yoooooooooooooou

Chorus:

I don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut,
No, I..don't wanna be an astronaut...
Just wanted to get away
Just wanted to hear ya say
That you're proud

Now I'm in my grave
Speaking from the beyond
Now I'm in my grave
"I don't care," you respond...

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Powerstars

Any way to write lyrics if not drunk? lol

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Dougdenslowe

All the replies on this site are overwhelming!

ThePhanastasio

Essentially, that's boring pop/hard-rock, like Three Days Grace ****. If that's what you're shooting for, you've fallen a little bit short, but you're close.

If you're wanting to be a singer-songwriter and have lyricism that isn't superficial and weak enough not to warrant a second glance from just about anyone:

Try for some less obvious rhymes. This is kind of sad with how obvious the monosyllabic rhymes are. I mean, ****, even Ke$ha has more diversity, and that says a lot.

Also, actually connect with your subject matter. This is a cool concept, but it's convoluted and not really anything at all unique or extraordinary. Work on making it unique TO YOU, and work on making it less generic.

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