Wrote a song

Jabonator · 02-17-2013, 02:33 AM

Some time ago, a long time since I've last written anything, inspiration hit me to write a song from the point of view of an old man in his deathbed. 30 minutes later I was done with a rough version of the lyrics. Feedback is appreciated.

Regrets

Looking back at my past, waiting to meet my maker
Things I've done, places I've been, people I've known
What was it for, was it all worth it?
I want to go in peace

Wish I had been kinder, happier
Wish I had been there for my family
Wish I had lived my life better
If only I knew it would pass so fast
I'd have lived in the moment, not dwelled on the past
Wish I had loved more

All my loved ones around me, saying their goodbyes
I won't cry, I hide behind my pride
I want to go with a smile
Fame my fears of not fearing anymore
There won't be another day

Wish I had been kinder, happier
Wish I had been there for my family
Wish I had lived my life better
If only I knew it would pass so fast
I'd have lived in the moment, not dwelled on the past
Wish I had loved more

I'm kinda liking some of the parts, but feel like some parts don't work as well, and it makes the whole thing a bit unbalanced.

02-17-2013, 02:33 AM	#1 (permalink)
Jabonator Groupie Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Finland Posts: 32	Wrote a song Some time ago, a long time since I've last written anything, inspiration hit me to write a song from the point of view of an old man in his deathbed. 30 minutes later I was done with a rough version of the lyrics. Feedback is appreciated. Regrets Looking back at my past, waiting to meet my maker Things I've done, places I've been, people I've known What was it for, was it all worth it? I want to go in peace Wish I had been kinder, happier Wish I had been there for my family Wish I had lived my life better If only I knew it would pass so fast I'd have lived in the moment, not dwelled on the past Wish I had loved more All my loved ones around me, saying their goodbyes I won't cry, I hide behind my pride I want to go with a smile Fame my fears of not fearing anymore There won't be another day Wish I had been kinder, happier Wish I had been there for my family Wish I had lived my life better If only I knew it would pass so fast I'd have lived in the moment, not dwelled on the past Wish I had loved more I'm kinda liking some of the parts, but feel like some parts don't work as well, and it makes the whole thing a bit unbalanced.