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11-14-2012, 03:28 PM | #1 (permalink) |
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Hi,
I wrote the lyrics below for one girl, but due to the text not fitting the song's melody, I'm gonna have to rewrite it. I'm expecting her to record and send her scratch vocals to me now. The thing is I've only written 2 song texts, this included, in my entire life. I know these lyrics are not perfect (I'm happy with most of the lines though) and I'd appreciate your contructive criticism. Be honest 1) Deep inside me there's a hole A very dark and lonely place It's where you left your goodbye note Stuck to the door of bedroom case Chorus: Restarting, reliving – getting passed what's been deceiving Forgetting, forgiving – cutting souls to end up living Remembering the feeling that was never to be lost Is just like re-cutting wounds and draining all the blood 2) It's not that I don't realize Our heartbeats never felt the same I found you reading my eyes Now every teardrop has your name Chorus: Restarting, reliving – getting passed what's been deceiving Forgetting, forgiving – cutting souls to end up living Remembering the feeling that was never to be lost Is just like re-cutting wounds and draining all the blood 3) Don't make me say things I don't think Let's not pretend we still can talk If there's one thing I truly wish It's that we hadn't built a home Chorus: Restarting, reliving – getting passed what's been deceiving Forgetting, forgiving – cutting souls to end up living Remembering the feeling that was never to be lost Is just like re-cutting wounds and draining all the blood You've left me the pieces of my life to be amended I'm sticking each crystal back to other one like puzzle The future has never been so calm and close to present You’re not what I'm looking for when traveling round the world |
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