Dawn of Deception (lyrics, punk, band, song)

flamingfishbone · 05-22-2005, 05:33 PM

The lack of emotion, respect and devotion,
and hollow stare emerging from his eyes
There not in spirit, noone would admit it,
They knew they were wrong, to feed him the lies

His function; rejection, His life; imperfection
Yet never before had his view been so clear
His hopes had been shattered, he'd thought he had mattered
Now he had no idea why he was here

Alone on this planet, he won't make amends
Devoid of compassion, betrayed by his friends
Stuck in the middle, not dead or alive,
And noone's around to see if he'll survive
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These Lyrics are from our punk band, AlPaJoDa.
Strung Out inspired me to write this song

riseagainstrocks · 05-23-2005, 09:55 AM

you seem sad. the rhyme scheme is nice however some of the wording (notably the second stanza) seesm cliched

05-22-2005, 05:33 PM	#1 (permalink)
flamingfishbone Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 61	Dawn of Deception The lack of emotion, respect and devotion, and hollow stare emerging from his eyes There not in spirit, noone would admit it, They knew they were wrong, to feed him the lies His function; rejection, His life; imperfection Yet never before had his view been so clear His hopes had been shattered, he'd thought he had mattered Now he had no idea why he was here Alone on this planet, he won't make amends Devoid of compassion, betrayed by his friends Stuck in the middle, not dead or alive, And noone's around to see if he'll survive -------------------------------------------- These Lyrics are from our punk band, AlPaJoDa. Strung Out inspired me to write this song

05-23-2005, 09:55 AM	#2 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	you seem sad. the rhyme scheme is nice however some of the wording (notably the second stanza) seesm cliched __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...