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Old 09-13-2012, 03:09 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Need some feedback on my lyrics please.

Hi all.
I just discovered this forum when looking for a place where I could post my lyrics and get some honest feedback.
These particular lyrics are about when I told my best friend that I had feelings for her and how I felt when she didn't feel the same. She basically told me it would never be the two of us. I am/was her best friend and she wanted us to be friends forever.
Writing lyrics when I'm feeling down, seems to have a therapeutic effect for me in some strange ways.
So here it goes:

Hollywood ending.

World is falling apart
Wrong choices made
Decisions of the heart

Life won’t let us choose
So special, so right
‘Forever’ is mine to lose

No hero, no happy ending
No riding into the sunset, no glory pending
No use hoping for a Hollywood ending


Laid it all on the line
Words like daggers
Made me close my eyes

No hero, no happy ending
No riding into the sunset, no glory pending
No use hoping for a Hollywood ending


So close yet far away
Too many flaws
There won’t be another day

No hero, no happy ending
No riding into the sunset, no glory pending
No use hoping for a Hollywood ending

No fireworks, darkness descending
Fade to black, no use pretending
For you and me, there is no Hollywood ending
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