bayleegrl88

I have been writing since forever, but I have never actually put my words to music until last year, when i took a lyric writing class and and now when i write i hear the music in my head, so I have been doing my best to make it come to life via a GarageBand app on my iPhone. these songs are very rough, mind you, and in no way finished. I would love to tweak them more if i had the musical ability or backup. I would love to get more opinions on the lyrics and whatnot, obviously I would like emphasis on the lyrics, but all comments in all aspects are always welcome. Just go to YouTube and search for my channel, bayleegrl88.the two newest ones are the ones i would like focus on, though you are welcome to listen to any one you choose. Thanks for listening!

[MERIT]

Why don't you post some of your lyrics on here instead? Stick around, get to know the place, banter about some music, and you'll be able to post your own YouTube videos on here in no time

bayleegrl88

Today time keeps on dragging
I know I need to escape
Get away from all this nagging
Complaining, problems I can’t shake
I just wanna run away

Chorus:
Don’t you know that feeling when
You’re flyin’ high
No one knows where you went
The higher you fly
Consciousness just slips away
As it should.
(End Chorus)

In a world gone to hell
Who am I supposed to believe?
So I toss a penny in a wishing well
Before I sell my soul to eat
I pray, pray to get away

So when my life is sad and lonely
I won’t get caught with my feet on the ground
I remember it’s not only
Me who needs to get away every once in awhile
I get a big old smile and I fly away

This is an older piece of mine that i havent set to music yet

bayleegrl88

A once beautiful woman
With such an ugly soul
I used to be your biggest fan
Now my hearts in turmoil

In my dreams, you haunt me
With a cold beer in hand
And now your face is all that taunts me
When I see that old beer can
Chorus:
Mother, Mother, Mother!
How’s the vodka treating you?
Drink it till your face turns blue
Mother, Mother, Mother!
You can’t hurt me anymore
Look in the mirror, you’ll see who’s the… (Shh)
(End Chorus)
I was taught to be nice
By the greatest man you never knew
But seeing you every day in my face
Makes it hard to forget about you
(Chorus)
If I never saw you again
It would be all too soon
Forget I was yours, and maybe then
I can forget I ever belonged to you
Bridge:
Walk away, it’s what you do best
Stay away, you’re poison on my tongue…
(Chorus)
*Look in the mirror, you’ll see who’s the WHORE.*

Johnny Longfellow

Really good. Seems like real pain.

bayleegrl88

It is, it makes some of the best lyrics i think i have written.

bayleegrl88

I'm prepared to go to war
In a fight for the ones I love
I've seen those bruises twice before
And now I'm pissed off
I'm seeing red, like the blood I saw
Running down her face, she crawled
Away from you, you pull her back

Chorus:
I'm gonna kill you
Wrap my hands around your throat till your lips go blue
I want you to suffer, suffer like she did
When you made her feel worthless
Do you feel like a man now?
With a woman to knock down?
Do it again I dare you
If I find you, I'm gonna kill you!
(End Chorus)

I love her more than life itself
Two women bound like one
That night she called to me for help
That night this story begun
I felt the rage within me
and now I'm more than ready

Chorus

How could you do this to her?
When all her trust was laid in you?
You made feel like a dirty whore
When you are just a dirty fool
Lay a finger on her flesh
I'll make it a day that you regret

Chorus

bayleegrl88

I don’t wanna be mad anymore
I don’t wanna live in a home at war
We can’t keep going on like this
Ignoring all the love we’ve missed
I wanna move forward but I don’t know how
I’m determined to make this right, right here right now

Chorus:
I wanna say I love you
But I resent you
You rely so much on me
It makes me hate you
But I don’t want to
This ain't how love should be
(End Chorus)

Call me immature, say I don’t deserve love
Try to make me hate myself make me shed a tear
You say you have the man above
You try to make me live in fear
I wanna move forward but I don’t know how
I’m determined to make this right, right here right now
(Chorus)
I wish we could be close, like I always dreamed
I wish we would try to hurt each other’s feelings
But dreams never come true, nor do wishes
At night I cry over all we’re missing
I wanna move forward but I don’t know how
I’m determined to make this right, right here, right now
(Chorus)

Please Comment, all opinions welcome!

bayleegrl88

Electric

From the moment I met you, I was magnetized
Your smile drew me in, had me hypnotized
You swept me off my feet with good old fashioned charm
In your arms I knew I would always be warm
Refrain:
We’ve sunken into a rut now
We’ve got to dig our way out
I refuse to let our passion burn down
(End Refrain)
Chorus:
Oh, how I miss when we
We were like electricity
How the sparks would fly between
Our lips, when we touched
So in love
So pure and free
Pure electricity
(End Chorus)
We’ve gotten used to the “same old thing”
If it ain’t broke, why should we change?
I want a touch to make me blow a fuse
A whisper in my ear “baby, I need you”
Refrain:
We’ve sunken into a rut now
We’ve got to dig our way out
I refuse to let our passion burn down
(End Refrain)
Let’s get in touch with our inner lust
Make everybody stare at us
Like two teenagers, make the whole world disappear
A beacon light, shining in the night, to make the road ahead clear.
Refrain:
We’ve sunken into a rut now
We’ve got to dig our way out
I refuse to let our passion burn down
Bridge:
Baby, don’t give up on me
Because I still believe
We can make pure electricity

Trollheart

Really good. Keeps the theme of electicity as a metaphor for passion running through the song without getting boring or overused; good rhymes that aren't lazy, and yeah, I can sort of hear the tune in my head as I read it. Great effort.

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