bayleegrl88

thanks, I am glad you like it I have been trying to experiment with metaphors and changing up rhyme schemes, I am glad its working.

bayleegrl88

I can take two shots of cuervo
And still walk straight as an arrow
All you gotta do is press your lips on mine
And suddenly I drank two bottles of wine
Someone ought to put a warning label on you
Be careful how much you consume
Chorus:
I thought my tolerance was high
You came and took me by surprise
Topsy, turvy, you crossed my eyes
Give me this feeling
A feeling I can’t describe, but I guess it’s like
Beer goggles
(End Chorus)
Your lips are so delicious, like a margarita
So salty and sweet, how bad I need a
Drink of that loving, you got me tipsy
Grabbing onto you to hold me up, I’m acting ditzy
I can’t believe you made me this way
You’re 100 proof, I can’t get through a glass of you
So come what may
(Chorus)
Hung over on you, I’m waking up alone again
Trying to pretend everything’s ok on my walk of shame
But you stop by and flash a smile
My visions getting blurry, knowing all the while
A touch is like a daiquiri, a kiss a margarita
And when you pull me close to you, we can make a pina colada
Bridge:
After being near you
I could nearly get arrested
I couldn’t control what I could do
I asked for more when I shouldn’t have tested it
But I will never regret it
(End Bridge)
(Chorus)

Janszoon

I've merged all of your lyrics threads into one. As per this forum's rules please post any new lyrics in this one thread.

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bigbird920

That's lovely. I write songs but I really struggle with lyrics. Maybe it's because I don't want people knowing my secrets! lol. It's interesting to see what way round people write - lyrics first, then music or vice versa. I'll check you out on YouTube.

bayleegrl88

Please try not to hate it based on my singing. I know I stink. But hopefully you can appreciate what I was going for

Trollheart

Sorry, this one I hate. Just sounds like you're trying to be too clever, and mixing rhymes that really shouldn't --- "magarita/need a" --- I also don't get the same feeling of sincerity that came through the first song I commented on ("Electricity"?), not to mention that the whole idea of comparing love to being drunk doesn't sit too well with me, though I know that's not what you're going for.

Personally, based on your other lyrics I know you're better than this, and I'd ignore this one. But don't stop writing; you have some good ideas.

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blastingas10

Just thought id post this around incase nobody sees it on my thread.


YouTube - My Song 3

Looking for feedback, please.

bayleegrl88

I appreciate your input, and your constructive criticism. I totally get where your coming from, and I know it's not my best, and it's a stretch. I was just trying to do something a little more fun, you know?

bayleegrl88

thank you, i am always glad to hear my work is appreciated