Sinking Into You

~~1moretroubadour~~ · 07-25-2012, 10:53 PM

I have almost never written lyrics that didn't have a song or melody to go along with. Its important to set up the foundation in music first before crafting the guide (words).

That said, I have an exception and looking at some of the great work here, here's one of mine.

I'm sinking into you
I don't know what to do
I'm just a stranger
In this reign of light

She's sinking into me
Poison I can't bleed
When I take her I can't breathe
She's killing me inside

In this wonder
In this light
I'm just a passerby
With every breath I lose
I'm sinking into you

ivorybenz · 07-26-2012, 11:22 AM

nice poetry there. not long enough to be considered a "song" or a "lyric". no chorus or anything thats why I said poetry. extend it into a lyric and Ill give it a true feedback. but it was decent for what it is though.

miinah-a-pun · 07-29-2012, 01:11 AM

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Originally Posted by ivorybenz

nice poetry there. not long enough to be considered a "song" or a "lyric". no chorus or anything thats why I said poetry. extend it into a lyric and Ill give it a true feedback. but it was decent for what it is though.

i think the same..... but still its awesome. i like it

07-25-2012, 10:53 PM	#1 (permalink)
~~1moretroubadour~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 43	Sinking Into You I have almost never written lyrics that didn't have a song or melody to go along with. Its important to set up the foundation in music first before crafting the guide (words). That said, I have an exception and looking at some of the great work here, here's one of mine. I'm sinking into you I don't know what to do I'm just a stranger In this reign of light She's sinking into me Poison I can't bleed When I take her I can't breathe She's killing me inside In this wonder In this light I'm just a passerby With every breath I lose I'm sinking into you

07-26-2012, 11:22 AM	#2 (permalink)
ivorybenz Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 6	nice poetry there. not long enough to be considered a "song" or a "lyric". no chorus or anything thats why I said poetry. extend it into a lyric and Ill give it a true feedback. but it was decent for what it is though.