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Old 07-06-2012, 07:21 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Tear down the walls
And let me near you
I hear your call
I will save you
I'll catch your fall
And be there for you
You'll get it all
Like you deserve to

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Your a beautiful girl
An angel in my eyes
You deserve the world
Instead of my lies
Trust is something you earn
Love it sometimes can burn
Time to give me a turn
Cause I've lived
And I've learned

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Give me a chance
To show that I've changed
You can lean on me
I'll keep you sane
Help carry your burden
Take all of your pain
Let me be your sun
And Let go of the rain

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Your a beautiful girl
A angel in my eyes
You deserve the world
Instead of my lies
Trust is something You earn
Love it sometimes can burn
Time to give me a turn
Cause I've lived
And I've learned

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All you need is my warm embrace
To stay fear in the face
Climb the highest mountain
Win the longest race
I will show you the way
I wiill guide you along
No more guessing my love
Feels to good to be wrong

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Your a beautiful girl
An angel in my eyes
You deserve the world
Instead of my lies
Trust is something you earn
Love it sometimes can burn
Time to give me a turn
Cause I've lived
And I've learned



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Old 07-06-2012, 07:38 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I told you that I'd love you
I said that I'd be there
I get lost in your eyes
Get lost in you stare

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But something's not right
I need you by my side
The demons inside
Enough to make you cry
Enough to make me cheat
Enough to make me lie
They tear me from my baby
Yeah, they keep me from my girl
So it's time to rid these demons
Rid these demons from my world

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I know that you felt lonely
Every promise that I broke
Every time you felt second best
Every time you felt the joke
I didn't always do you right
But you never let me know
Baby your my angel
And it's time for it to show

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But something's not right
I need you by my side
The demons inside
Enough to make you cry
Enough to make me cheat
Enough to make me lie
They tear me from my baby
Yeah, they keep me from my girl
It's time to rid these demons
Rid these demons from my world

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Waiting by the window
Waiting for my call
You deserve everything
You deserve it all
A heart full of love
A mind that is free
You'll get everything
You so beautiful to me

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But something's not right
I need you by my side
The demons inside
Enough to make you cry
Enough to make me cheat
Enough to make me lie
They tear me from my baby
Yeah, they keep from my girl
So it's time to rid these demons
Rid these demons from my world

Yeah, it's time to rid these demons
Rid these demons from my world


To my beautiful daughter, JORDAN

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Old 07-06-2012, 08:01 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Girl you damaged me
Beyond repair
Lifes in disarray
I'm in despair
I won't say it's easy
But it's not that hard
To get close to me
But you feel so far

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I should have known it
We always felt apart
The way you treated me
Right from the very start
I should have known right then
But I kept

Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on yeah, yeah, yeah, yeah

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Now my life is
Out of control
Time spent with you
Has taken its toll
I'm not your lover
No I'm not your friend
Time for me to leave
This place I'm in

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I should have known it
We always felt apart
The way you treated me
Right from the very start
I should have known right then
But I kept

Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on yeah,yeah,yeah,yeah

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This separation
Is long overdue
Your vow to love
It just wasn't true
You left me helpless
And feeling blue
Without a clue
Of what to do

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I should have known it
We always apart
The way you treated me
Right from the very start
I should have known right then
But I kept

Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on
You kept me holding on
Holding on yeah,yeah,yeah,yeah

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Old 07-06-2012, 08:03 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Please keep all of your songwriting in one thread as per our rules. Thanks.
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Old 07-06-2012, 08:13 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Sometimes it feels like love
Could never be the same
That's when we learned to love
That's when we overcame
I love a sunny morning
Because I know the rain
And Ive got to feel your hurt
So I can know your pain

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Your pain is my pain
My pain is yours
It's time for change
Can't be the same
This gift has come my way
She's got to stay
Don't runaway
Don't runaway
I'll make this vow to you
I'm gonna change

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A lot of things are done
Lessons aren't always fun
But the hurting's got to come
Before our hearts can beat as one
I never meant to hurt you
Or to make you cry
No more doubting my love
No more asking why

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Your pain is my pain
My pain is yours
Its time for change
Can't be the same
This gift has come my way
And she's got to stay
Dont runaway
Don't runaway
I'll make this vow to you
I'm gonna change

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We all want happy endings
We all love fairy tales
Your the closet I've come
Every other story fails
This ain't no Disney movie
We've learned a lesson or two
Finally found my true love
My princess in you

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Your pain is my pain
My pain is yours
It's time for change
Can't be the same
This gift has come my way
And she's got to stay
Don't runaway
Don't runaway
I make this vow to you
I'm gonna change

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Old 07-06-2012, 08:14 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Old 07-06-2012, 09:46 AM   #7 (permalink)
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All these lessons
They test my patience
All these arguments
All these confrontation's
Lead to trials
And tribulations
There's only one way
To fix this situation

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We made a declaration
To lead our nation
And write love
A constitution

No more confusion
No revolution
The only solution
Is to write love
A constitution
There'll be no more blues then
So our hearts can mend
Now that love has a constitution

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We all need rules
and regulations
Like a constitution
For a nation
A set of rules
To keep the order
You and I can be
The founding fathers

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We made a declaration
To lead our nation
And write love
A constitution

No more confusion
No revolution
The only solution
Is to write love
A constitution
There'll be no more blues, then
So our hearts cans mend
Now that love
Has a constitution

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Like a guide
To keep us on track
Our love has grown
We can't go back
We found a way
To make this work
No infidelity
No one gets hurt

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We made a declaration
To lead our nation
And write love
A constitution

No more confusion
No revolution
The only solution
Is to write love
A constitution
There'll be more blues, then
So our hearts can mend
Now that love
Has a constitution

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Old 07-06-2012, 09:58 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I'm sorry
I've been on the run
Searching
For some kind of fun
Something
To help overcome
All of
The things that I've done

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You should have been number one
I've been a bad bad son

You stay by my side
And continue the fight
You have my whole life

There's just one more thing that I'd like
Let me be your baby, tonight

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Don't worry
I'll be by your side
Let's hurry
And get on with our lives
I promise
To always make it right
I'll love you
Until the end of time

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You should have been number one
I've been a bad bad son

You stay by my side
And continue the fight
You have my whole life

There's just one more thing that I'd like
Let me be your baby, tonight

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Im trying
To always stay straight
I'm dying
Behind all this hate
Been hiding
And trying to wait
Now it's time
To change my life's fate

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You should have been number one
I've been a bad bad son

You stay by my side
And continue the fight
You have my whole life

There's just one more thing that I'd like
Let me be your baby, tonight

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Old 07-06-2012, 10:06 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Shouldnt have said I do
I knew it that night
I could feel it in my heart
I could see it in your eyes
Love is lonely
This time it seems to be
I'm no good for you
And your no good for me

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We've already had
Enough despair
And I can see in your eyes
That you just don't care
Like ships sailing away
We're drifting apart
I better get ready
To mend this broken heart

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Shouldn't have said I do
I knew it that night
I could feel in my heart
I could see it your eyes
Love is lonely
This time it seems to be
I'm no good for you
And you no good for me

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You never had my back
Never truly mine
So I knew
It was just a matter of time
He's the one
Always on your mind
I'm the one
That gets left behind

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I shouldn't have said I do
I knew it that night
I could feel it in my heart
I could see it in your eyes
Love is lonely
This time it seems to be
I'm no good for you
And your no good for me

No, I'm no good for you
And your no good for me

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Old 07-06-2012, 10:14 AM   #10 (permalink)
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I am really mot a fan of love songs in the first place, and these are so sweet I feel like I'm getting diabetes. There's definitely a market for this sort of thing, but I personally do not like it.
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