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Old 08-18-2012, 09:40 PM   #31 (permalink)
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Default Take me away

When I was young
Things were much easier
When I was small
Things were alright
Now that I've grown
I stay up worrying
Now that I'm older
I worry all night

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So take me away
From what's bothering me
Take me away
Away from myself
Help me to learn
teach me to accept
Take me away
Please, I need your help

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

My younger days
We're so easy
When I was a child
Life was a breeze
My golden years
Have been so hard on me
The door is locked
And I've lost the keys

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So take me away
From what's bothering me
Take me away
Away from myself
Help me to learn
Teach me to accept
Take me away
Please, I need your help

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

All this stress
Affects my rest
And I accept
Much less than my best
I'll have to work harder
I guess
To get the respect
I expect

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So take me away
From what's bothering me
Take me away
Away from myself
Help me to learn
Teach me to accept
Take me away
Please, I need your help
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Old 09-19-2012, 12:58 PM   #32 (permalink)
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Default Walked out on me

Why won't you love me
My love is so true
I don't deserve
The things that you do
But I am still waiting
Here, crying alone
Hopelessly for you
To come back home

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I'm falling to pieces
You're breaking me down
I'm losing my mind
Now that your not around

My heart is heavy
Yeah, I can barely breathe
Life is so empty
Since you walked out on me

my life is so empty
Since you walked out on me
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

What was the reason
Why did you go
You promised to love me
But you hurt me so
I may be crazy
But it's the way that I am
I am still waiting
You don't give a damn

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I'm falling to pieces
You're breaking me down
I'm losing my mind
Now that your not around

My heart is heavy
Yeah, I can barely breath. -yeah
Life is so empty
Since you walked out on me

my life is so empty
Since you walked out on me
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I'm really special.
In time you will see
You were so lucky
That you had me
Now I'm tired of waiting
And you failed the test
One day you'll see
That you lost the best

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


I'm falling to pieces
You're breaking me down
I'm losing my mind
Now that your not around

My heart is heavy
Yeah, I can barely breath
Life is so empty
Since you walked out on me

my life is so empty
Since you walked out on me

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Now you're falling to pieces
I'm breaking down
You're losing your mind
Now that I'm not around

Your heart is heavy
Yeah, you can barely breath
Your life is so empty


Since you don't have me
your life is so empty

Since you won't have me
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Old 09-19-2012, 12:59 PM   #33 (permalink)
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All my life I've cried
Ive been wondering why
No matter how hard I try
I can't stop getting high

When I look in my eyes
It's gets me terrified
Under beautiful skies
Still hoping to die

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Demon's in my brain
They're driving me insane
Going down the wrong lane
Needle in my vein

Devil's in my heart
And he's tearing me apart
I can't take the pain
Needle in my vein

I'm living in shame
No one but myself to blame
It's time for me to change
Needle in my vein

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

This needle in my vein
It feels good for a while
I don't feel the pain
life don't seem so vile

it never seems to last
Misery always comes back
Pleasure goes so fast
I'm back under attack

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Demon's in my brain
They're driving me insane
Down the wrong lane
Needle in my vein

Devil's in my heart
And he's tearing me apart
I can't take the pain
Needle in my vein

I'm living in shame
No one but myself to blame
It's time for me to change
Needle in my vein

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

All I've overcome
I'm no longer numb
Now my life beats
To a different drum

I don't feel the same
I don't feel the pain
There's no more needle
Inside of my vein

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Demon's in my brain
They're driving me insane
Down the wrong lane
Needle in my vein

Devil's in my heart
And he's tearing me apart
I can't take the pain
Needle in my vein

I'm living in shame
No one but myself to blame
It's time for me to change
Needle in my vein

©JCB 2012
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Old 09-19-2012, 01:00 PM   #34 (permalink)
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It's time for change
I'm going insane
Days filled with rain
My heart filled with pain

So I'll move on along
To where I belong
All on my own
Where I feel at home

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DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger

Why can't I see
I'm my worst enemy
And wherever I go
I follow me
So I'll have to change
To finally feel free

Cause wherever I go
I follow me

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

It's like I'm at war
Within myself
I see the scar's
And realize I need help

I've battled so long
I can't fight anymore
My mind is broken
And my heart is torn

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger

Why can't I see
I'm my worst enemy
And wherever I go
I follow me
So I'll have to change
To finally feel free

Cause wherever I go
I follow me


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I pay for these lies
By this feeling inside
I can't run and hide
Cause I stay by my side

So, it's time to stay
No, I can't runaway
Living, day by day
Is the only way

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger

Why can't I see
I'm my worst enemy
And wherever I go
I follow me
So I'll have to change
To finally feel free

Cause wherever I go
I follow me

©JCB 2012
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Old 09-19-2012, 01:01 PM   #35 (permalink)
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🎶Genres: 🎤Country


Put your ring on your finger
Get your ass out the bar
Say goodbye to the stranger
And get back in the car

These feelings can linger
Sometimes way to far
You just don't know
How lucky you are

Girl, you just don't know
How lucky you are

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I'm not a scholar
I don't always win
But I'm a fighter
You'll see in the end
No, I won't give up
Just that easily
You'll have to do
A lot more to me

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Put you ring on your finger
Get your ass out the bar
Say good bye to the stranger
And get back in the car

These feelings can linger
Sometimes way to far
You just don't know
How lucky you are

Girl, you just don't know
How lucky you are

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


I don't have a million dollars
I can't afford the finer things
But baby I love you
And that's why I sing
I know that it seems
like it's not a big thing
But baby I feel like
My hearts in a sling

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Put your ring on your finger
Get your ass out the bar
Say goodbye to the stranger
And get back in the car
these feelings can linger
Sometimes way to far
You just don't know
How lucky you are

Girl, you just know
How lucky you are

©JCB 2012
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Old 09-19-2012, 01:19 PM   #36 (permalink)
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You're really spitting these things out like Dylan. Id say stick to the country thing. Those lyrics are as good as anything I hear on pop country radio stations. It's an easy formula to follow.
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Old 09-19-2012, 05:03 PM   #37 (permalink)
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You're really spitting these things out like Dylan. Id say stick to the country thing. Those lyrics are as good as anything I hear on pop country radio stations. It's an easy formula to follow.
Thank a lot. I really appreciate it. Lots of problems/ trouble makes for good material
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Old 09-19-2012, 05:05 PM   #38 (permalink)
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Now the storm has passed
And the sun is shining
All you've done for me
Girl, your a fine thing

We've grown along the way
Cause the roads been winding
your still here with me
I see your word is binding

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

There's a silver lining
In back of the clouds
It'll all be worth it
gonna make you proud

I've learned a lot lessons
lost a lot of respect
I'm gonna be that person
The man you expect

At the end of the storm
You get all my heart
This silver lining
Brings a brand new start

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I could barely see
The pain's been blinding
no longer overcast
Your love is guiding

But now I finally see
And with perfect timing
I will find our way
Find a silver lining

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

There's a silver lining
In back of the clouds
It'll all be worth it
gonna make you proud

I've learned a lot lessons
lost a lot of respect
I'm gonna be that person
The man you expect

At the end of the storm
You get all my heart
This silver lining
Brings a brand new start

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I made a lot of mistakes
But I'm finally finding
Behind every cloud
There's a silver lining

No, we're not perfect
But I'm not whining
Behind every cloud
There's a silver lining

Now the rain is gone
And the sun is shining
Behind every cloud
There's a silver lining

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
There's a silver lining
In back of the clouds
It'll all be worth it
gonna make you proud

I've learned a lot of lessons
lost a lot of respect
I'm gonna be that person
The man you expect

At the end of the storm
You get all my heart
This silver lining
Brings a brand new start



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Old 09-19-2012, 05:07 PM   #39 (permalink)
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I can't follow your lead
Cause you've lost control
All of our battles
Have taken there toll

I don't which side
That I'm fighting for
There's is no winner
When love is at war

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Why would I love you
Your always so mad
I must be confused
I've been treated so bad

I've been mentally abused
And wrongly accused
I feel so used
Why would I love you

Why, tell me why
Why would I love you

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

All the breakdowns, I've had
I can't take it anymore
Cause your always mad
What are you mad for

What did I do
To be treated this way
Time for me to go
And fight another day

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Why would I love you
Your always so mad
I must be confused
I've been treated so bad

Ive been mentally abused
And wrongly accused
I feel so used
Why would I love you

Why, tell me why
Why would I love

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This time I'm leaving
I won't be back
So tired of feeling
Under attack

I know you'll be sorry
I know you'll regret
That you treated me badly
You didn't pay me respect

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Why would I love you
Your always so mad
I must be confused
I've been treated so bad

Ive been mentally abused
And wrongly accused
I feel so used
Why would I love you

Why, tell me why
Why would I love you

Why, tell me why
Why would I love you


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Old 09-19-2012, 05:08 PM   #40 (permalink)
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Your shattered spirit
Is just the start
Your broken dreams
Weigh down on my heart

Girl, I let you down
I hurt you so bad
I ruined the best love
That I've ever had

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I am a loser
A loser at love
I lost an angel
Sent from above

I lost the best girl
That there ever was
I am a loser
A loser at love

I am a loser
A loser at love
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

A beautiful flower
That's lost all it's petals
Dealing with me
You deserve a medal

I'm just no good
You're just to great
Took your loving heart
And turned it to hate

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I am a loser
A loser at love
I lost an angel
Sent from above

I lost the best girl
That there ever was
I am a loser
A loser at love

I am a loser
A loser at love

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I'd love another chance
But I know it's to late
I destroyed your feelings
And you lost all fate

Why did I gamble
Why your fragile heart
I should have folded
Right from the start

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I am a loser
A loser at love
I lost an Angel
Sent from above

I lost the best girl
That there ever was
I am a loser
A loser at love

I am a loser
A loser at love



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