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Johnny Longfellow · 07-06-2012, 10:22 AM

Thanks for your opinion, I really appreciate it. But you obviously didn't read them all.
Signed, insulin

Johnny Longfellow · 07-06-2012, 10:45 AM

Chillin with Sheila
Marie and Frieda
You know I'm a leader
So I had to feed her
A big burrito
But before I breed her
Drank a margarita
And a couple of mojito's

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Then I'd slid up next to her
Then I slid up on in her
Just like a mosquito
Fast like a cheetah
Sing and dance like a Beiber
I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito
Yeah, I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Drinking at a cantina
When I seen her
A señorita
From South Covina
I approached
She said my name is Lena
My moms from mexico
Dad's Filipino

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Then I slid up next to her
Then I slid up on in her
Just like a mosquito
Fast like a cheetah
Sing and dance like a Beiber
I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito
Yeah, I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Inside the arena
Then I seen her
I ordered a foot long
With jalapeño
She said thanks for your order
My name is Tina
The hotdog is free
If you show me your wiener

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Then I slid up next to her
Then I slid up on in her
Just like a mosquito
Fast like a cheetah
Sing and dance like a Beiber
I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito
Yeah, I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Shooting tequila
With a girl name katrina
Looks like a model
Laughs like a hyena
She licks up the salt
And turns up the glass
Bites on the lime
Then offers that ass

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Then up slid up next to her
Then I slid up on in her
Just like a mosquito
Fast like a cheetah
Sing and dance like a Beiber
I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito
Yeah, I gave her the fever
Stung her like a mosquito

Johnny Longfellow · 07-06-2012, 10:59 AM

When you touch me
Your hands feel stone
When I'm with you
I feel all alone
You behaving badly
Your mood sets the tone
You make this house
Not feel like a home

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So it's time to roam
And be on my own
I feel so alone
I feel so alone
Barely hanging on
Loves all but gone
I feel so alone
I feel so alone
This bird has flown
And Im not coming home
I feel so alone
I feel so alone

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

You've treated me badly
For oh so long
You promised to love me
But hurts all that I've known
Since we've been together
Loves all that I've shown
I know that you love me
But our love has not grown

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

So it's time to roam
And be on my own
I feel so alone
I feel so alone
Barely hanging on
Loves all but gone
I feel so alone
I feel so alone
This bird has flown
And I'm not coming home
I feel so alone
I feel so alone

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So alone, so alone
I feel so alone
It feels so wrong
So I ain't coming home

Johnny Longfellow · 07-06-2012, 11:12 AM

My heart is pounding
It skips a beat
When I see your face
Every time we meet
Like a sunny Sunday morning
Like a new born child
Just like Heaven's angels
When you laugh or smile

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

And love......
Is so much better
This time around

It's so much better
True love I've found
I've got to keep her
Wipe off that frown
Storm the weather
To you I'm bound
We'll be together

This time around
Love is better
Yeah, this time around
Love's so much better

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I want to rock your body
I want rock your mind
I want to make you mine
All of the time
I love your big brown eyes
Your so hot, your so fine
You lips drive me crazy
My hearts on fire

And love......
Is so much better
This time around

It's so much better
True love I've found
I've got to keep her
Wipe off that frown
Storm the weather
To you I'm bound
We'll be together

This time around
Love is better
Yeah, this time around
Love's so much better

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

You know I love you
Good and the bad
Yours is the best love
I've ever had
Stay by my side
as I walk down the road
Help me to steer my way
And carry the load

And love.....
Is so much better
This time around

It's so much better
True love I've found
I've got to keep her
Wipe off that frown
Storm the weather
To you I'm bound
We'll be together

This time around
Love is better
Yeah, this time around
Love's so much better

Johnny Longfellow · 07-11-2012, 10:18 AM

It's a sad sad tale
Outside it's raining
And they call for hail
I'm stuck inside
My skin is pale
Time to change my life
All I do is fail

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I've done all you say
Doesn't seem to pay
Just want to be okay

There's got to be a better way

I've got to stay
Take it day by day
Live by what I say
Chase the rain away
And make a brighter day

Keep fighting
Make a brighter day
Keep searching
I'm trying to find my way
Keep working
No more time for play

It's time for the rain to end
And make a brighter day
Sometimes losers got to win
And make a brighter day

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Grey skies
Keep me down
Rain and thunder
My only sound
Blue skies
Don't seem to last
My life forever
Overcast

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I've done what they say
Doesn't seem to pay
Just want to be okay

There's got to be a better way

I've got to stay
Take it day by day
Live by what I say
And make a brighter day

Keep fighting
Make a brighter day
Keep searching
Trying to find my way
Keep working
No more time for play

It's time for the rain to end
And make a brighter day
Sometimes losers got to win
And make a brighter day

miinah-a-pun · 07-20-2012, 06:59 AM

all of them are nice...so honest...keep it up friend

Johnny Longfellow · 08-06-2012, 10:57 PM

always stuck in this hole
tortured mind, tortured soul
watch the damage grow
as torture takes its toll
no more lying, looking bold
while I'm feeling down and low
no escape, no place to go
time to fix this tortured soul

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

time to rock and time to roll
time to fix this tortured soul
I'm tired of being told
all my dreams and my goals
my heart is getting cold
all these dreams are getting old
its time to take control
and fix this tortured soul

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

sometimes its hard to know
if I'm my friend or I'm foe
I don't which way to go
all my problems seem to grow
what's the answer i don't know
life's direction's just don't flow
its been a long and winding road
so it's time to take control

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

time to rock and time to roll
time to fix this tortured soul
I'm tired of being told
all my dreams and all my goals
my heart is getting cold
all my dreams are getting old
it's time to take control
and fix this tortured soul

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

we've got to reap what we sow
but how much lower can i go
my mind's about to blow
time to end this horror show (faint gun shot in background)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

time to rock and time to roll
time to fix this tortured soul
I'm tired of being told
all my dreams and all my goals
my heart is getting cold
all these games are getting old
it's time to take control
and fix this tortured soul

Johnny Longfellow · 08-16-2012, 08:44 PM

Ive got to change
I'm going insane
Days filled with rain
My heart filled with pain
So I'll move on along
To where I belong
All on my own
Where I feel at home

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger
Why can't I see
That I'm my worst enemy
Wherever I go
I follow me

I'll have to change
To finally be free

Cause wherever I go
That's where I'll be

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

It's like I'm at war
Within myself
I see the scar's
Realize I need help
I've battled so long
I can't fight anymore
My mind is broken
And my heart is torn

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger
Why can't I see
That I'm my worst enemy
Wherever I go
I follow me

I'll have to change
To finally feel free

Cause wherever I go
That's where I'll be

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I can't follow the leader
Cause he lost control
All of these battles
Have taken there toll
I don't which side
That I'm fighting for
I can't remember
Why I'm at war

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
Yeah, I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Things seems to get stranger
Why can't I see
That I'm my worst enemy
Wherever I go
I follow me

I'll have to change
To finally be free

Cause wherever I go
That's where I'll be

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I can't run and hide
By these rules I'll abide
I pay for these lies
By this feeling inside
I can't runaway
I've got to stay
Living day by day
Is the only way

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

DANGER, DANGER
I'm in danger
And the longer I live
Life seems to get stranger
Why can't I see
That I'm my worst enemy
Wherever I go
I follow me

I'll have to change
To finally be free

Cause wherever I go
That's where I'll be

Johnny Longfellow · 08-16-2012, 08:46 PM

Vulture's flock where titans lie
To torture's rock condemned for size
On tortures rock your mother lies
With the goddess by her side
I saw, the titan's with my eyes
And the vulture's in the skies
While the goddess seem's so wise
Mankind's destruction is her prize

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Rest in peace
Oh mother may I
Rest in peace.

Rest in peace
Right where I lie
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I close my eyes
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I finally die
Rest in peace

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

This might be our final ride
Unless we finally turn the tide
Man and titan's on one side
And the vultures join the fight
Mankind, titan's, vultures, rise
And they become allies
We will finally cut the ties
As the goddess finally sighs

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Rest In peace
Oh mother may I
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
Right here I lie
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I close my eyes
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I finally die
Rest in peace

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Prepare to fight and don't deny
To kill the goddess is our prize
By our rules she must abide
The goddess better run and hide
Judging by the titan's size
And the way the vulture flies
Now we're going to hear her cries
As the goddess finally dies

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Rest in peace
Oh mother may I
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
Right where I lie
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I close my eyes
Rest in peace

Rest in peace
I finally die
Rest in peace

Johnny Longfellow · 08-16-2012, 08:49 PM

I'm getting older
Still trying to show her
And she's getting colder
The longer I know her
I can't blame, I can't scold her
Got to love and got to hold her
And remove the boulder
That rest on my shoulder's

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The weight of the world
Is coming down on me
The good and the bad
All of our memories
The everyday problem's
That not everyone see's
The weight of the world
Has come down on me

I've got to lighten my load
For me to feel free
Cause the weight of the world
Has come down on me

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Look to day's that have passed
Learn my lesson's at last
Life goes to fast
Yesterday's in the past
So I'm changing my ways
Going back to better days
When Innocence paid
And I didn't have this weight

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The weight of the world
Is coming down on me
The good and the bad
All of our memories
The everyday problem's
That not everyone see's
The weight of the world
Has come down on me

I've got to lighten my load
So that I can breath
Cause the weight of the world
Has come down on me

07-06-2012, 10:45 AM	#12 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	Mosquito Chillin with Sheila Marie and Frieda You know I'm a leader So I had to feed her A big burrito But before I breed her Drank a margarita And a couple of mojito's ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Then I'd slid up next to her Then I slid up on in her Just like a mosquito Fast like a cheetah Sing and dance like a Beiber I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito Yeah, I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Drinking at a cantina When I seen her A señorita From South Covina I approached She said my name is Lena My moms from mexico Dad's Filipino ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Then I slid up next to her Then I slid up on in her Just like a mosquito Fast like a cheetah Sing and dance like a Beiber I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito Yeah, I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Inside the arena Then I seen her I ordered a foot long With jalapeño She said thanks for your order My name is Tina The hotdog is free If you show me your wiener ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Then I slid up next to her Then I slid up on in her Just like a mosquito Fast like a cheetah Sing and dance like a Beiber I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito Yeah, I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Shooting tequila With a girl name katrina Looks like a model Laughs like a hyena She licks up the salt And turns up the glass Bites on the lime Then offers that ass ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Then up slid up next to her Then I slid up on in her Just like a mosquito Fast like a cheetah Sing and dance like a Beiber I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito Yeah, I gave her the fever Stung her like a mosquito Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:10 PM.

07-06-2012, 10:59 AM	#13 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	So alone When you touch me Your hands feel stone When I'm with you I feel all alone You behaving badly Your mood sets the tone You make this house Not feel like a home ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ So it's time to roam And be on my own I feel so alone I feel so alone Barely hanging on Loves all but gone I feel so alone I feel so alone This bird has flown And Im not coming home I feel so alone I feel so alone ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You've treated me badly For oh so long You promised to love me But hurts all that I've known Since we've been together Loves all that I've shown I know that you love me But our love has not grown ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ So it's time to roam And be on my own I feel so alone I feel so alone Barely hanging on Loves all but gone I feel so alone I feel so alone This bird has flown And I'm not coming home I feel so alone I feel so alone ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ So alone, so alone I feel so alone It feels so wrong So I ain't coming home Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:11 PM.

07-06-2012, 11:12 AM	#14 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	This time around My heart is pounding It skips a beat When I see your face Every time we meet Like a sunny Sunday morning Like a new born child Just like Heaven's angels When you laugh or smile ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ And love...... Is so much better This time around It's so much better True love I've found I've got to keep her Wipe off that frown Storm the weather To you I'm bound We'll be together This time around Love is better Yeah, this time around Love's so much better ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I want to rock your body I want rock your mind I want to make you mine All of the time I love your big brown eyes Your so hot, your so fine You lips drive me crazy My hearts on fire And love...... Is so much better This time around It's so much better True love I've found I've got to keep her Wipe off that frown Storm the weather To you I'm bound We'll be together This time around Love is better Yeah, this time around Love's so much better ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You know I love you Good and the bad Yours is the best love I've ever had Stay by my side as I walk down the road Help me to steer my way And carry the load And love..... Is so much better This time around It's so much better True love I've found I've got to keep her Wipe off that frown Storm the weather To you I'm bound We'll be together This time around Love is better Yeah, this time around Love's so much better Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:13 PM.

07-11-2012, 10:18 AM	#15 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	Brighter Day It's a sad sad tale Outside it's raining And they call for hail I'm stuck inside My skin is pale Time to change my life All I do is fail ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I've done all you say Doesn't seem to pay Just want to be okay There's got to be a better way I've got to stay Take it day by day Live by what I say Chase the rain away And make a brighter day Keep fighting Make a brighter day Keep searching I'm trying to find my way Keep working No more time for play It's time for the rain to end And make a brighter day Sometimes losers got to win And make a brighter day ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Grey skies Keep me down Rain and thunder My only sound Blue skies Don't seem to last My life forever Overcast ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I've done what they say Doesn't seem to pay Just want to be okay There's got to be a better way I've got to stay Take it day by day Live by what I say And make a brighter day Keep fighting Make a brighter day Keep searching Trying to find my way Keep working No more time for play It's time for the rain to end And make a brighter day Sometimes losers got to win And make a brighter day Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:14 PM.

08-06-2012, 10:57 PM	#17 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	tortured soul always stuck in this hole tortured mind, tortured soul watch the damage grow as torture takes its toll no more lying, looking bold while I'm feeling down and low no escape, no place to go time to fix this tortured soul ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ time to rock and time to roll time to fix this tortured soul I'm tired of being told all my dreams and my goals my heart is getting cold all these dreams are getting old its time to take control and fix this tortured soul ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ sometimes its hard to know if I'm my friend or I'm foe I don't which way to go all my problems seem to grow what's the answer i don't know life's direction's just don't flow its been a long and winding road so it's time to take control ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ time to rock and time to roll time to fix this tortured soul I'm tired of being told all my dreams and all my goals my heart is getting cold all my dreams are getting old it's time to take control and fix this tortured soul ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ we've got to reap what we sow but how much lower can i go my mind's about to blow time to end this horror show (faint gun shot in background) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ time to rock and time to roll time to fix this tortured soul I'm tired of being told all my dreams and all my goals my heart is getting cold all these games are getting old it's time to take control and fix this tortured soul Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:21 PM.

07-06-2012, 10:22 AM	#11 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	Thanks for your opinion, I really appreciate it. But you obviously didn't read them all. Signed, insulin

07-20-2012, 06:59 AM	#16 (permalink)
miinah-a-pun Groupie Join Date: Mar 2012 Location: POKHARA, NEPAL Posts: 40	all of them are nice...so honest...keep it up friend

08-16-2012, 08:44 PM	#18 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	I follow me Ive got to change I'm going insane Days filled with rain My heart filled with pain So I'll move on along To where I belong All on my own Where I feel at home ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ DANGER, DANGER Yeah, I'm in danger And the longer I live Life seems to get stranger Why can't I see That I'm my worst enemy Wherever I go I follow me I'll have to change To finally be free Cause wherever I go That's where I'll be ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ It's like I'm at war Within myself I see the scar's Realize I need help I've battled so long I can't fight anymore My mind is broken And my heart is torn ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ DANGER, DANGER Yeah, I'm in danger And the longer I live Life seems to get stranger Why can't I see That I'm my worst enemy Wherever I go I follow me I'll have to change To finally feel free Cause wherever I go That's where I'll be ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I can't follow the leader Cause he lost control All of these battles Have taken there toll I don't which side That I'm fighting for I can't remember Why I'm at war ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ DANGER, DANGER Yeah, I'm in danger And the longer I live Things seems to get stranger Why can't I see That I'm my worst enemy Wherever I go I follow me I'll have to change To finally be free Cause wherever I go That's where I'll be ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I can't run and hide By these rules I'll abide I pay for these lies By this feeling inside I can't runaway I've got to stay Living day by day Is the only way ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ DANGER, DANGER I'm in danger And the longer I live Life seems to get stranger Why can't I see That I'm my worst enemy Wherever I go I follow me I'll have to change To finally be free Cause wherever I go That's where I'll be Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:16 PM.

08-16-2012, 08:46 PM	#19 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	Rest in peace Vulture's flock where titans lie To torture's rock condemned for size On tortures rock your mother lies With the goddess by her side I saw, the titan's with my eyes And the vulture's in the skies While the goddess seem's so wise Mankind's destruction is her prize ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Rest in peace Oh mother may I Rest in peace. Rest in peace Right where I lie Rest in peace Rest in peace I close my eyes Rest in peace Rest in peace I finally die Rest in peace ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This might be our final ride Unless we finally turn the tide Man and titan's on one side And the vultures join the fight Mankind, titan's, vultures, rise And they become allies We will finally cut the ties As the goddess finally sighs ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Rest In peace Oh mother may I Rest in peace Rest in peace Right here I lie Rest in peace Rest in peace I close my eyes Rest in peace Rest in peace I finally die Rest in peace ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Prepare to fight and don't deny To kill the goddess is our prize By our rules she must abide The goddess better run and hide Judging by the titan's size And the way the vulture flies Now we're going to hear her cries As the goddess finally dies ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Rest in peace Oh mother may I Rest in peace Rest in peace Right where I lie Rest in peace Rest in peace I close my eyes Rest in peace Rest in peace I finally die Rest in peace Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:19 PM.

08-16-2012, 08:49 PM	#20 (permalink)
Johnny Longfellow Groupie Join Date: Jul 2012 Posts: 44	Weight of the world I'm getting older Still trying to show her And she's getting colder The longer I know her I can't blame, I can't scold her Got to love and got to hold her And remove the boulder That rest on my shoulder's ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The weight of the world Is coming down on me The good and the bad All of our memories The everyday problem's That not everyone see's The weight of the world Has come down on me I've got to lighten my load For me to feel free Cause the weight of the world Has come down on me ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Look to day's that have passed Learn my lesson's at last Life goes to fast Yesterday's in the past So I'm changing my ways Going back to better days When Innocence paid And I didn't have this weight ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The weight of the world Is coming down on me The good and the bad All of our memories The everyday problem's That not everyone see's The weight of the world Has come down on me I've got to lighten my load So that I can breath Cause the weight of the world Has come down on me Last edited by Johnny Longfellow; 08-18-2012 at 10:19 PM.