Daniisarus

Okay guys, so even though I'm kinda new to this forum, doesn't mean I'm new to music haha.
I wrote this song a while back, it's about one of my ex-friends who threatened to stab me and I was paranoid for _weeks_ it was a pretty bad time in my life.
I started writing this on April 8 2012 and the first draft goes as follows (I lost the good copies )

Oh, where do I start?
You played with my feelings and broke my heart.
I lie broken,
You live your life acting outspoken.

I'm counting all your lies.
You threaten me with my demise.
Your time will come,
You've ran out of "friends" to go running to,
Do I look that dumb?

Now, comes a crucial time.
When, for you, the planets will align.
As cold as your heart, your world will eclipse.
But now, we'll decide your fate.
Influenced only, by your hate.
You'll never get out of this
All you words said to me..
Dismissed.
and when you meet your end.
You'll see you've lost, your only friend.

So guys I'm not really asking for hate, because you might not like it, I am 14, keep in mind :P
But anything that could help me with my future writing is appreciated