Just need some feedback for my lyrics... (There made in the style of a rap)

2paclives · 06-03-2012, 08:16 AM

I've literally just written them down so dont be to mean lol

Dear God, it's me again wots happ'nin...
I'm feelin like a ship lost at sea, no captain
Runnin low like the net with no bandwidth
Wanna break free from this life I've been trapped with.

Dont think I'd still be breathin if it wasn't for music
People say im talented so im gonna use it.
Got a lot of stress in my life i wanna lose it
No one can change me forever spittin true ****.

Livin in this time things get kinda hectic
Sometimes i cant help but get so ****in apoplectic
By the time I'm paid I've already gone n spent it
My first words were '**** the World Bitch' an I'ma end it

I think I'll regenerate into a ****in dalek
Take over the world, Smoke an L, get my crotch kissed
Travel round the globe find a girl I wanna **** with
Take her home and Sonic ScrewDrive-Her in my TARDIS.

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06-03-2012, 08:16 AM	#1 (permalink)
2paclives Groupie Join Date: Jun 2012 Location: Birmingham, England Posts: 8	Just need some feedback for my lyrics... (There made in the style of a rap) I've literally just written them down so dont be to mean lol Dear God, it's me again wots happ'nin... I'm feelin like a ship lost at sea, no captain Runnin low like the net with no bandwidth Wanna break free from this life I've been trapped with. Dont think I'd still be breathin if it wasn't for music People say im talented so im gonna use it. Got a lot of stress in my life i wanna lose it No one can change me forever spittin true **. Livin in this time things get kinda hectic Sometimes i cant help but get so in apoplectic By the time I'm paid I've already gone n spent it My first words were ' the World Bitch' an I'ma end it I think I'll regenerate into a in dalek Take over the world, Smoke an L, get my crotch kissed Travel round the globe find a girl I wanna ** with Take her home and Sonic ScrewDrive-Her in my TARDIS. Last edited by 2paclives; 06-03-2012 at 12:13 PM.