PianoLuva4Ever

This was my second rap I wrote. It is a Christian Rap. Hope u guys like. Here, I was aimming to organize my lines, so that there would not be too many sylables in one line, because the more syllables there are in one line, the faster you must go, thus increasing the risk of fumbling up words and becoming unclear. Anyway, Here it is:

Tangled

Rollin’ down da road in ma red mustang
I see da chicks starin’ like if I’m their one idol
All ma homies hangin’ ‘round, we think that everything is cool
But everything is in a mess, within our lives

We ignore, all the bumps, as if they’re nothing of us
Jesus lookin’ straight at us, expecting a call
But this world keeps us tangled with its deceptive vines
But we’re gonna fight back, ‘cause Jesus Christ is for us

Chorus (sung)
Tangled, I’m tangled, in this world
The enemy sly and underhanded seeks to devour
I can’t live this life full of sin and shame
Father please forgive me and untangle me from these vines!

Eminem, Jay-Z hypnotizing the teens
With their messed up lives, full of crack and nicotine
Negativity strikes like missiles rainin’ down
Jesus come! Jesus come! Untangle me from all this mess!

Father God, please forgive me
For the sins I’ve done, I know I’ve done it all wrong, I wanna get it all right
Don’t be like me, who lives all tangled in vines
Live your life that your God above has planned all for you!

Chorus x2
Tangled, I’m tangled, in this world
The enemy sly and underhanded seeks to devour
I can’t live this life full of sin and shame
Father please forgive me and untangle me from these vines!

The melody of the chorus is as follows: (the dashes mean rests and the beats are 1 and 2 and etc. The | means end of measure) The chords are above the melody

A minor--> |C major |D minor |E7 |
C-AGC-A-|CDEA-GAG|C-AGCCAG|CDEC---A|D-DCD-DC|DDCD-DDF|EEDFEED|EEFE----|