Another Night

TheOtherNewestOne · 01-29-2012, 09:00 PM

So, it's been a long, long, long time. But I'm back (see introduction area for details. Or don't.) I thought I'd jump into it. I started this about 3 months ago, and wrote half, and finished it the other night.

Another Night

My friends and I were at a house party
Just one of many, in our junior year.
Another drink, another shot
Of cheap shitty vodka
Or tequila or really
Just whatever the host could get.
You know that feeling?
That you’ve had one too many.
I never felt it, just kept going and going.
Earlier in the day I’d gone to school
Thinking thank god it’s Friday.
Let’s go out and get drunk tonight.

But had I known this would be
My last night on Earth
Maybe I’d have
Taken things slower with you, sweetheart.
Maybe I’d have told my parents I loved them
Just one last time.
But as it stands
This is my last night on earth;
A crowded jam of headlights, horns
And shattering glass.

Today I took my daughter out to dinner
Her mother hates me; A baby out of wedlock
And even that couldn’t get me to get it together.
I had one hand on the wheel and the other
Stretched behind me, clutching my little girl’s hand.
She was laughing. Smiling so hard I thought
At any moment, her mouth would crack.
And after all these years, finally on my feet.
Finally a chance extended to me
To be a father to my child.

But had I known this would be
My last night on Earth
Maybe I’d have
Gotten my shit together sooner.
Maybe I’d have treated her better,
Put down the belt and pill bottle.
But as it stands
This is my last night on Earth;
A crowded jam of headlights, horns
And my little girl’s screams.

TheNiceGuy · 01-30-2012, 01:11 AM

This is really deep stuff here. It really paints a picture of the situation whilst also fleshing out the identities in the poem(?).

Out of interest's sake is this meant to be poetry or song lyrics?

TheOtherNewestOne · 01-30-2012, 02:31 AM

Poetry, definitely. It was semi-inspired by Night On Earth by the Bouncing Souls, if that matters.

TheNiceGuy · 01-31-2012, 06:14 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TheOtherNewestOne

Poetry, definitely. It was semi-inspired by Night On Earth by the Bouncing Souls, if that matters.

In either case it's a very strong piece.

01-29-2012, 09:00 PM	#1 (permalink)
TheOtherNewestOne Groupie Join Date: May 2009 Location: America. Posts: 17	Another Night So, it's been a long, long, long time. But I'm back (see introduction area for details. Or don't.) I thought I'd jump into it. I started this about 3 months ago, and wrote half, and finished it the other night. Another Night My friends and I were at a house party Just one of many, in our junior year. Another drink, another shot Of cheap shitty vodka Or tequila or really Just whatever the host could get. You know that feeling? That you’ve had one too many. I never felt it, just kept going and going. Earlier in the day I’d gone to school Thinking thank god it’s Friday. Let’s go out and get drunk tonight. But had I known this would be My last night on Earth Maybe I’d have Taken things slower with you, sweetheart. Maybe I’d have told my parents I loved them Just one last time. But as it stands This is my last night on earth; A crowded jam of headlights, horns And shattering glass. Today I took my daughter out to dinner Her mother hates me; A baby out of wedlock And even that couldn’t get me to get it together. I had one hand on the wheel and the other Stretched behind me, clutching my little girl’s hand. She was laughing. Smiling so hard I thought At any moment, her mouth would crack. And after all these years, finally on my feet. Finally a chance extended to me To be a father to my child. But had I known this would be My last night on Earth Maybe I’d have Gotten my shit together sooner. Maybe I’d have treated her better, Put down the belt and pill bottle. But as it stands This is my last night on Earth; A crowded jam of headlights, horns And my little girl’s screams.

01-30-2012, 01:11 AM	#2 (permalink)
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01-30-2012, 02:31 AM	#3 (permalink)
TheOtherNewestOne Groupie Join Date: May 2009 Location: America. Posts: 17	Poetry, definitely. It was semi-inspired by Night On Earth by the Bouncing Souls, if that matters.