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Old 09-01-2011, 08:36 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Post an unfinished poem i called Dead... comments?

Always Asleep,
counting Sheep,
Never Awake,
through an earthquake,
still wont wake,
not even turn in my sleep,
it seems i am dead,
if i can take off my head
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:37 PM   #2 (permalink)
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please tell me if dis is good chizz plzzz
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:44 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Can I tell you if it's ridiculously bad?
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:46 PM   #4 (permalink)
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i dont relly mind much... i kno its complete crap :P
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i dont relly mind much... i kno its complete crap :P
Consider it done.
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:50 PM   #6 (permalink)
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haha, i relly need help with this song writing crap
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:51 PM   #7 (permalink)
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haha, i relly need help with this song writing crap
If it's just "song writing crap" to you, then I don't think you'll ever get anywhere with it.
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:52 PM   #8 (permalink)
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ah, whatever.. i dont relly care if i get anywhere in song writing
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Old 09-01-2011, 08:53 PM   #9 (permalink)
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ah, whatever.. i dont relly care if i get anywhere in song writing
The real question is do you really care about writing songs, regardless of whether you get anywhere or not.
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