First time song writer, need some help please

TaoGreg · 07-19-2011, 06:47 PM

hello everyone,

I am trying to write a song about a girl, but it isn't a song about spite for a break up or trying to get her to fall in love with me, we've already talked about going out and she has some emotional problems she has to get over before she can really date anyone.

this song is really more like admiration and acknowledgment of how beautiful and prefect she is.

I have tried some songwriting methods I have read online like listing things I know about her or writing a story and writing the song based on that, but its turning out to be really difficult.

I have subject matter to write the song, my real big issues right now are coming up with the title (don't really want it to just be her name, that seems like a tired concept) and the song structure.

Any help would be greatly appreciated, I am a visual and audio learner so examples would also be great

mb stonehouse · 07-23-2011, 12:38 PM

Hi Greg.

Here's some things I've learned over the years.

Always write honestly.Honest words leap off the page and makes a connection with your listener or reader.

Try to say more with fewer words.Use every word sparingly.Use words that offer more than one meaning,words that suits the topic.

Put the pen down and walk away every now and then.Come back at a later time with fresh eyes and a fresh mind and then continue.

Edit when necessary.(It's almost ALWAYS necessary)

Try to say something that no one has ever said before (ya I know.That's pretty damn hard),or try to put a new spin on an old cliche.Don't use worn cliches.Compare her to something in every day life your listener can relate to...."Her eyes were the colour of warm molasses brown bread."Warm eyes.Warm bread.Both comforting.See how it fits together?It also lets you know she just doesn't have your run of the mill brown eyes but she has DARK brown eyes without actually just saying it.Or,"darlin' yer as fine as a bathroom fixture in a Five Star Hotel!"For a bit of humour.

There comes a time when you begin to know the song or poem is nearly done.If this piece of writing means a lot to you,don't be in a rush.

As for the title,imho,only the writer should name his child.
Keep writing!
mb

TaoGreg · 07-23-2011, 07:40 PM

thank you mb

this helps, much appreciated

jenurenazensis · 08-03-2011, 06:33 AM

Music helps to show your feelings and you have chosen a right way to describe your feelings.Just write it every thing whatever is coming in your mind when you see her.Because feelings are more important than words. When you start writing from your heart words automatically come in your mind.Dont think about the results more it will only distract you.

07-19-2011, 06:47 PM	#1 (permalink)
TaoGreg Groupie Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 2	First time song writer, need some help please hello everyone, I am trying to write a song about a girl, but it isn't a song about spite for a break up or trying to get her to fall in love with me, we've already talked about going out and she has some emotional problems she has to get over before she can really date anyone. this song is really more like admiration and acknowledgment of how beautiful and prefect she is. I have tried some songwriting methods I have read online like listing things I know about her or writing a story and writing the song based on that, but its turning out to be really difficult. I have subject matter to write the song, my real big issues right now are coming up with the title (don't really want it to just be her name, that seems like a tired concept) and the song structure. Any help would be greatly appreciated, I am a visual and audio learner so examples would also be great

07-23-2011, 12:38 PM	#2 (permalink)
mb stonehouse Groupie Join Date: May 2011 Posts: 29	Hi Greg. Here's some things I've learned over the years. Always write honestly.Honest words leap off the page and makes a connection with your listener or reader. Try to say more with fewer words.Use every word sparingly.Use words that offer more than one meaning,words that suits the topic. Put the pen down and walk away every now and then.Come back at a later time with fresh eyes and a fresh mind and then continue. Edit when necessary.(It's almost ALWAYS necessary) Try to say something that no one has ever said before (ya I know.That's pretty damn hard),or try to put a new spin on an old cliche.Don't use worn cliches.Compare her to something in every day life your listener can relate to...."Her eyes were the colour of warm molasses brown bread."Warm eyes.Warm bread.Both comforting.See how it fits together?It also lets you know she just doesn't have your run of the mill brown eyes but she has DARK brown eyes without actually just saying it.Or,"darlin' yer as fine as a bathroom fixture in a Five Star Hotel!"For a bit of humour. There comes a time when you begin to know the song or poem is nearly done.If this piece of writing means a lot to you,don't be in a rush. As for the title,imho,only the writer should name his child. Keep writing! mb Last edited by mb stonehouse; 07-23-2011 at 01:01 PM.

07-23-2011, 07:40 PM	#3 (permalink)
TaoGreg Groupie Join Date: Jul 2011 Posts: 2	thank you mb this helps, much appreciated

08-03-2011, 06:33 AM	#4 (permalink)
jenurenazensis Groupie Join Date: Aug 2011 Posts: 6	Music helps to show your feelings and you have chosen a right way to describe your feelings.Just write it every thing whatever is coming in your mind when you see her.Because feelings are more important than words. When you start writing from your heart words automatically come in your mind.Dont think about the results more it will only distract you.