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Old 06-22-2011, 12:05 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Join Date: Jun 2011
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Question First post ever; reviews please.

Title: Turn my back(unfinished)

Chorus: The whole world has turned it's back so i just burn one fat, sit back , relax.
I'm all alone and no one knows or even cares as a matter of fact.
The whole word has turned it's back so here i do the same.
I'm all alone but that's okay i don't wanna be around you lames.

Verse 1:
(Uh) Virtue, just deserted and passed.
I'd love to hurt you but that's just out of my class.

Like the end of my lecture and im the professor
Left with stacks of the paper, i give an F to them haters.

I ain't got no one close cause to those who be-friended me
My fan base has shrinken and grown more to my enemies.

This young asian-american that made blind to who'd stare at him,
but if he blinked then they would just seem to be there again.

With a whole world that was arrogant,
deprived of a pride just so people would care again.

And i ask the whole world are you hearin' him?
Unless they deaf then soon enough they gotta be starin' man.

Swear these hoes gotta be feeling him,
this my version of a love note no wonder why i'm concealin' em.

Bitch i loved you and there ain't no questioning that,
but i'm left with no answers as you turn in your test and all i see is your back.

(Chorus)

Again i would love reviews, good or bad it only betters myself as a writer. This is pretty much my first song i've ever actually sat down and wrote. Not sure if i should finish it with a second verse i will leave that decision up to you guys. Thanks for reading!
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