The first song I've wrote - Dance Diva...is it any good?

GemmaBayBee · 06-05-2011, 05:49 PM

Hey guys! I'm working on song atm(Don't steal please) It's called "Dance Diva" Here are the lyrics. Please,please tell me what you think! And this is literally the first one I've wrote and I know it'll probably be verrry bad But I thought I'd post it on here just for fun

Opening:

Yeah,uh huh,
stand up and dance,
what you gonna do
tonight? Yeah...

Lyrics:

Sitting here in the club
with my friends. See a
hot guy,walk over to him.
Ask him for a dance,I'm
gonna get my prey,yeah
cos...

Chorus:

I'mma dance diva. I
always get my way. It
don't matter who you are
cos I'll get my own way.
All you crazy chicks and dues,
you can run away,but it don't
matter cos I'mma,I'mma dance
diva

Lyrics(Cont):

Sitting at the bar sipping
tequilla. Everybody dancin'
in the club but I don't
wanna move. See all the
bleach blonde tramps with
their fake leather bags.
They think they're so hot
but don't they know,don't
they know,do they not know
that...

Chorus:

I'mma dance diva. I
always get my way. It
don't matter who you are
cos I'll get my own way.
All you crazy chicks and
dudes,you can run away but
it don't matter cos I'mma,
I'mma dance diva.

Lyrics - RAPPING

Yeah,yeah so don't
underestimate me baaaaby.
I'm of supermodel status
I always get my way.So
don't mess with me cos
don'tcha know that Santa
don't come to naughty boys
and girls

(FINAL VERSE - CHORUS)

I'mma dance diva. I always
get my way. It don't matter
who you are cos I'll get my
own way. All you crazy
chicks and dudes,you can run
away but it don't matter cos
I'mma,I'mma dance diva

Is it any good?

Freebase Dali · 06-05-2011, 06:07 PM

You could be the next Rebecca Black.

Sljslj · 06-06-2011, 12:42 AM

Imo, no, it's not good at all.

Just keep writing, practice makes perfect.

~~The Virgin~~ · 06-14-2011, 10:27 AM

you could use some rhymes to enhance the lyrics.

06-05-2011, 05:49 PM	#1 (permalink)
GemmaBayBee Groupie Join Date: Jun 2011 Posts: 1	The first song I've wrote - Dance Diva...is it any good? Hey guys! I'm working on song atm(Don't steal please) It's called "Dance Diva" Here are the lyrics. Please,please tell me what you think! And this is literally the first one I've wrote and I know it'll probably be verrry bad But I thought I'd post it on here just for fun Opening: Yeah,uh huh, stand up and dance, what you gonna do tonight? Yeah... Lyrics: Sitting here in the club with my friends. See a hot guy,walk over to him. Ask him for a dance,I'm gonna get my prey,yeah cos... Chorus: I'mma dance diva. I always get my way. It don't matter who you are cos I'll get my own way. All you crazy chicks and dues, you can run away,but it don't matter cos I'mma,I'mma dance diva Lyrics(Cont): Sitting at the bar sipping tequilla. Everybody dancin' in the club but I don't wanna move. See all the bleach blonde tramps with their fake leather bags. They think they're so hot but don't they know,don't they know,do they not know that... Chorus: I'mma dance diva. I always get my way. It don't matter who you are cos I'll get my own way. All you crazy chicks and dudes,you can run away but it don't matter cos I'mma, I'mma dance diva. Lyrics - RAPPING Yeah,yeah so don't underestimate me baaaaby. I'm of supermodel status I always get my way.So don't mess with me cos don'tcha know that Santa don't come to naughty boys and girls (FINAL VERSE - CHORUS) I'mma dance diva. I always get my way. It don't matter who you are cos I'll get my own way. All you crazy chicks and dudes,you can run away but it don't matter cos I'mma,I'mma dance diva Is it any good?

06-06-2011, 12:42 AM	#3 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	Imo, no, it's not good at all. Just keep writing, practice makes perfect. __________________ MY LYRICS

06-05-2011, 06:07 PM	#2 (permalink)
Freebase Dali Partying on the inside Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 5,584	You could be the next Rebecca Black.

06-14-2011, 10:27 AM	#4 (permalink)
~~The Virgin~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Mar 2011 Location: Cebu, Philippines Posts: 677	you could use some rhymes to enhance the lyrics.