WeAreUnwritten

I'm hoping to get a bit of a review on these lyrics. This song is my latest and basically sums up my life at the moment...

Tracks

The railway has split and I can't slow down to think
I can't shake the feeling that I am sinking
Oh we're going down

It's time to say goodbye but I don't know who to say it to
And I can't name the poison that I've been drinking
When we go to town

I have to face a decision that I can't make
The time I have left is shrinking
Oh I'm losing ground

This train isn't showing any signs of slowing
And will these chains start unlinking?
Now that I've been found

Things have just changed for the better
But now they're changing again

And I don't care
If I can make it to the moon
'Cause I don't want to try
I want to go my own way to a different place
And I don't care
If I'm not what people think I should be
Because maybe they're wrong
And I don't understand
Why yesterday seems so far away

The lines go on too long for me to see the end
I don't know which takes me to where I want to go
How can I make a choice?

I can't tell if things people say mean anything
If I don't see for myself then how can I know?
I'm finding my voice

Things have just changed for the better
But now they're changing again
I want to stay here
Why do I have no time left?

And I don't care
If I can make it to the moon
'Cause I don't want to try
I want to go my own way to a different place
And I don't care
If I'm not what people think I should be
Because maybe they're wrong
And I don't understand
Why yesterday seems so far away

Lately I've been wondering who I am
Because it's clear to me that I'm not the same anymore
And maybe I don't need to have a plan
Because it's easy to see that they*never worked before

And I don't care
If you don't want to come with me
Because maybe that's a sign
That this isn't your destiny it's a road built for me

And I don't care
If I can make it to the moon
'Cause I don't want to try
I want to go my own way to a different place
And I don't care
If I'm not what people think I should be
Because maybe they're wrong
And I don't understand
Why yesterday seems so far away

And I don't care
If you don't want to come with me
Because maybe that's a sign
That this isn't your destiny it's a road built for me
And I don't care
If I'm wasting opportunities
They're just not the tracks I want to take
The railway has split
And I can't slow down to think

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I'm watching the night sky as loneliness sinks in
I don't know where I am or where I've just been...

The Virgin

do you have a beat or musical notes or something?
well, so far the lyrics are fine. i just find it a bit...sad

WeAreUnwritten

Well yes, it is sad...
My band hasn't worked on it yet so I don't know exactly what will go with it but I can tell you it's written in 3/4

__________________
I'm watching the night sky as loneliness sinks in
I don't know where I am or where I've just been...

The Virgin

i hope it's not played in flats. it doesn't suit the lyrics.