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View Poll Results: What do you think?
Horrible 1 20.00%
Good 1 20.00%
Ok 2 40.00%
Dont try writing 4 80.00%
Multiple Choice Poll. Voters: 5. You may not vote on this poll

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Old 05-09-2011, 06:09 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Please don't Go

Do you see me?
I gotta know that you are there
I just want to reach out
But it feels as though you dont care
Why cant we just make a journey
A space in time
Where I am yours
And you are mine
Why does it hurt so bad
To just want to feel my arms around you

Lets just take this chance
Cause baby this is killing me
(x20

If your words are true
Fight for it
You cant let go
Just cause things wont be easy
If you truly care
Take my hand
And dont let go
Lets just take this chance
For i will never let you fall

Dream as though these roads are never ending
(x2)

Baby please dont go
Cause i know im gonna miss you like crazy
If your words are true
I think your gonna miss me too

Baby why cant it just be you and me
Just tell me why
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Old 05-12-2011, 04:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i would not have "don't try writing" as a poll answer, although the lyrics lack any real depth i would not ever tell you to not write i mean the fact that you wrote a song in itself can be considered impressive on some level all you need to do is hone your skill.

if you want to learn more about writing more in depth lyrics try looking up Iron & Wine, Bright Eyes, Bon Iver, Etc... (also i know other people may think these suggestions aren't great but they will get the job done)

and don't just listen to the music read the lyrics.

also don't be afraid to make the songs personal and what i mean is make the song yours make it so even if someone you know stole the song your friends would still be able to tell you wrote it.
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Old 06-22-2011, 09:06 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Did you do the lyrics yourself, thats cool


Dark Side by Kelly Clarkson ( i love this)


Here's a place that i know
it's not pretty there and few have ever gone
if i show it to you now
will it make you run away

or will you stay
even if it hurts
even if i try to push you out
will you return?
and remind me who i really am
please remind me who i really am
everybody's got a dark side
do you love me?
can you love mine?
nobody's a picture perfect
but we're worth it
you know that we're worth it
will you love me?
even with my dark side?

like a diamond
from black dust
it's hard to know
it can become
a few give up
so don't give up on me
please remind me who i really am

everybody's got a dark side
do you love me?
can you love mine?
nobody's a picture perfect
but we're worth it
you know that we're worth it
will you love me?
even with my dark side?

don't run away
don't run away
just tell me that you will stay
promise me you will stay
don't run away
don't run away
just promise me you will stay
promise me you will stay
will you love me? ohh
everybody's got a dark side
do you love me?
can you love mine?
nobody's a picture perfect
but we're worth it
you know that we're worth it
will you love me?
even with my dark side?
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