Arya Stark

That's all you got out of that paragraph? I'm not saying you are crying for attention, I'm saying that's what it looks like because it doesn't seem to have any real depth. I'm still left wondering why you said it other than to say it. I don't feel it's creative, I just feel it's talking. But if that's what you were going for, then good job.

I'm not telling you to stop writing, I'm just giving you some food for thought. Maybe to transform your writing from a diary entry or "expressing" your creativity to something that feels a little more poetic when somebody reads it.

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Key

I appreciate the advice though i'll just say that it is exactly what I go for. I know this isn't how traditional poetry is written, it may not even be considered poetry.

It's more of a "you have to know what's going on in my head" sort of thing to understand it.

Sljslj

I like most of the stuff that you've written here. I don't have anything constructive to say right now, but I just wanna wish you well and tell you I'm excited to read what you write next.

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Key

(To be completed)

So much to say, so much to do,
so many ways to express my feelings toward you.
Can't tell if it's hatred or lust,
or something as sacred as trust.

Though I keep in mind that I have never met you,
you've been in my head all along.

Can't decipher if you're real or if you're fake,
but I can see you standing,
hear you speaking,
and feel you in my grasp.