Moonlight Waxing Lyrical

Arya Stark · 12-05-2010, 10:53 PM

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Originally Posted by MoonlitSunshine

This is the latest poem I've written, though due to the rather impersonal topic, there probably isn't much to be read into about my personality in it :P My Girlfriend's sister recently got married, and their wedding cake was a fairy tale seen of the brave hero saving the damsel from the dragon :P This poem was originally meant to be a wedding present - composed by me and illustrated and written out all fancy like by my gf - but time and inspiration meant it got pushed back to a christmas present! It finished it a few days ago (it was largely the reason why I decided to find all the poetry I've done in the past).

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A Long time ago in a far away land
There lived a famously beautiful Dame
She made all else seem ever so Bland
'Tis said Fair Esther was her name

From all across the land they'd travel
To try their chances at her Court
All with Glorious yarns to unravel
Of Feats and Fights and Foes they Fought!

But lo there lived one spiteful Fan
A Wyrm who ruled the Mountain Vales
And so he hatched an evil plan
To put an end to all their Tales

He Struck the sleeping court at night
And Stole fair Esther from her room
For all the men, try as they might
Could not prevent her hapless Doom

The dawn was greeted by cries of Woe
But One stood tall 'gainst tidings grave:
A Champion to battle this Fearsome Foe
His name was Sir Duncan, Handsome and Brave

So Duncan set out on his Faithful Steed
And while he rode he Schemed and planned
To battle the Dragon's Insatiable Greed
To win back the most Wonderful Jewel of the Land

At last he came to the Foul Wyrm's Lair
Spying Fair Esther, his heart set a-thrill
She called out to him to be on his ware
As the Dragon flew close with Murderous Will!

But Sir Duncan was ready, and turned to defend
His Steadfast resolve the Wyrm could not break
A Slash! And Again! His Sword did Rend
And Slew the Dreadful, Monstrous Drake!

The Land rejoiced the return of their Maiden
And Cries for their Wedding sang up to the Rafters
The plans were set, the tables were laden
And Duncan and Esther lived Happily Ever After

I feel like there's a very confusing mix here between what we know of Old English and new English. Some lines are too modern for me. I'm not sure if it's because I know it's newly written or if I'm being fair.

FreddyCitySoundtrack · 12-06-2010, 12:40 PM

I love that Darkness poem!
In that poem how do you pronouce that word 'usurped'?

MoonlitSunshine · 12-07-2010, 05:52 AM

kinda like "you-zerped" most decent dictionaries will have a phonetic spelling of it, just in case your accent is vastly different to mine, though!

@AwwSugar: any worlds in particular? I did use some quite old words, but I hadn't noticed any clashes of such. That said, I did write most of it in a day and it hasn't reaaallly been read over yet!

FreddyCitySoundtrack · 12-07-2010, 12:51 PM

I wrote this one in like an hour...so don't judge me too harshly! =D

Untiltled
There isn't much to do here.
If life was mostly spent by learning inside school to do nothing but live it as so...I probably would've killed myself by now.
I keep saying that i hope the end of us all comes soon... I lie.
But i guess you haven't realized that you don't know...how i love you so.
if it weren't for you I would've been out and about without a trace.
When you're around him i feel so much sorrow.
Im feeling what you feel...and it isn't happiness.
It is the deep depression you feel...what we both feel.
Do me and yourself a favor...leave him...by all means.
Not because i want to be with you but for you can be happy once again.
You once told me, if you didn't find me on that first day...the rest would be lonely and like hell for you.
When I don't see you for while...I ask, "How have you been the past few days?"
In my mind i hope you answer with good news.
Somethin terrible would just break my heart.
In this world... I don't know what i would do without you.
For every moment in your life... I hope for the best for you.
12/7/10

12-07-2010, 05:52 AM	#13 (permalink)
MoonlitSunshine Dat's Der Bunny! Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Ireland Posts: 1,088	kinda like "you-zerped" most decent dictionaries will have a phonetic spelling of it, just in case your accent is vastly different to mine, though! @AwwSugar: any worlds in particular? I did use some quite old words, but I hadn't noticed any clashes of such. That said, I did write most of it in a day and it hasn't reaaallly been read over yet! __________________ "I found it eventually, at the bottom of a locker in a disused laboratory, with a sign on the door saying "Beware of the Leopard". Ever thought of going into Advertising?" - Arthur Dent

12-06-2010, 12:40 PM	#12 (permalink)
FreddyCitySoundtrack Groupie Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Fontana Posts: 12	I love that Darkness poem! In that poem how do you pronouce that word 'usurped'?

12-07-2010, 12:51 PM	#14 (permalink)
FreddyCitySoundtrack Groupie Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: Fontana Posts: 12	I wrote this one in like an hour...so don't judge me too harshly! =D Untiltled There isn't much to do here. If life was mostly spent by learning inside school to do nothing but live it as so...I probably would've killed myself by now. I keep saying that i hope the end of us all comes soon... I lie. But i guess you haven't realized that you don't know...how i love you so. if it weren't for you I would've been out and about without a trace. When you're around him i feel so much sorrow. Im feeling what you feel...and it isn't happiness. It is the deep depression you feel...what we both feel. Do me and yourself a favor...leave him...by all means. Not because i want to be with you but for you can be happy once again. You once told me, if you didn't find me on that first day...the rest would be lonely and like hell for you. When I don't see you for while...I ask, "How have you been the past few days?" In my mind i hope you answer with good news. Somethin terrible would just break my heart. In this world... I don't know what i would do without you. For every moment in your life... I hope for the best for you. 12/7/10