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11-26-2010, 06:19 PM
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Groupie
Join Date: Nov 2010
Posts: 2
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Couple of my songs i have wrote (lyrics)
hey here is all the songs i have wrote in the last 2 months, C&C please and thanks. i am 14 and play mostly Metal / Death core,
punishment. OOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Fire raining from the sky my mind dissolving Whats going on? whats happening? This worlds done Ever Changed Folding in Burning up You idiots! You did this! Its your fault! Now you will be punished! Fire raining from the sky My mind dissolving Whats going on whats happening You Fools! What have you done? You will be punished The ground dissolving beneath you Fall to your death! This is a symbol this is your punishment Fall into the flames This worlds done Ever Changed Folding in Burning up The water steaming Heating up Burning for eternity This is your punishment You idiots! You did this! What now? Whatr you gonna do? Your death awaits you ! Betrayal Your hero of so long the inspiration of so many how could you? your betrayal caused so many pain How could you do this? how could you pull the trigger? the smoking barrel in hand how could you kill him? your hero of so long the inspiration of so many A bullet in the back your the cause your the reason your betrayal your the reason you pulled the trigger the gun in hand the smoking barrel a bullet in the back the legend of a generation The smoking gun in hand the hero of so many shot in the back your betrayal knockout your blood on the ground your head on the floor your reputation done your gonna regret this Your gone no where to be seen one of us i out who will it be? stepping out preparing for the brawl your time has come your knocked out everyone gathering around placing there bets its happening here and now who's it going to be who is it who will step up your last chance your going down one of us is done one of us is gone our reputation is finished it happens here Reasons Unknown Your body laying cold misunderstood personality gone to reasons unknown this must be a trick the beat of your music the greatest of your kind the inspiration of us all the musician of life your energy shown power in your beats walking the streets judged by your looks misunderstood this must be a trick loved by so many gone to reasons unknown the inspiration of us all the beat of life your energy shown to all walking the streets judged by your looks misunderstood loved by so many gone to reasons unknown War family's left behind troops out fighting so you can live free risking there life the fight for your rights they are risking there life so you can have yours this is a war for freedom soldiers dieing leaving there family's your rights protected because they risk there life gun shots ringing bullets flying risking there life for your right to live war raging people dieing blame them greedy ******** Sending your sons, daughters, brothers, sisters, mothers, fathers to fight for greed to fight for your rights they risk there life fighting in all directions never knowing whats around every corner loved one's not knowing if they are coming back family's left for months to risk there life in a war for greed in a war for freedom Loner Always Quiet hiding in the shadows always out to the side never in the crowd today is his day to show himself to stop being a loner no one sees him there never notices him hes different hes quiet today is his day to prove himself to not be a loner always quiet always hiding in the shadows never seen never heard today is his day to prove himself to show who he is to show what he can do he will be heard people will see him he will no longer be a loner Nightmare Hidden in your mind your fears everywhere battling to take over This is a nightmare Ready to take over your thoughts hidden in your mind your greatest fears fighting against you demons of your mind confronting you always there showing themselves in your sleep Hidden waiting for you to sleep plotting there attack preparing to take over confront them show them you aren't afraid prove can conquer them END THIS! hidden in your mind your fears everywhere battling to take over this is your nightmare Hidden waiting for you to sleep plotting there attack preparing to take over Be prepared attack back destroy them end this END this ******* nightmare!! |
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11-26-2010, 07:46 PM
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The Omniscient
Join Date: Mar 2010
Location: Reno, Nevada, USA
Posts: 998
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These are okay for metalcore, though you should try something more original. Try to go a little outside of your comfort zone and you may surprise yourself. Keep writing, friend.
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