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Old 11-12-2010, 09:42 PM   #1 (permalink)
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this is just a random thing i did off the top of my head so i just want some feed back good or bad.

[...] i talk the talk and i walk the talk all u haters suck my f'ckin ****, late night convo on the telephone call up lady gaga everybody's laughin like haha, but this aint slim shady, baby but shady made me, now watch out for my fade away jump shot, im so hot you gon need them sun glasses i look at asses just for fun i blow away the fog just so i can watch you walk cuz me without you's kinda like dog with no bun, step up in my ride and i escape the high tide got my hair dyed and i dare you touch it man it's like dutch cuz my name is van ****.

(my last name's van ****)
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Old 11-12-2010, 09:52 PM   #2 (permalink)
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That pretty much sucked, in my opinion. But then again, I think most rhymes that come out of the mouths of a lot world-known/successful rappers suck. So it could just be me...
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Old 11-12-2010, 10:36 PM   #3 (permalink)
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that.was.iiinteresting.
im not saying that i disagree w/ u freebase... im not saying that AT ALL.
what is ur last name btw? cuz i didnt get that part cuz of the stars so it ddnt rlly rhyme...
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Old 11-12-2010, 10:47 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Dyke.
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Old 11-12-2010, 10:51 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Alright lyriscism. Lyrics themselves weren't too bad. Actually pretty funny. Sounds a bit like you're inspired by peak-years Eminem. While that's fine, just know that those kinds of flows and subject matter have worn off now. Just be careful not to bite another rapper's style.
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Old 11-13-2010, 10:38 AM   #6 (permalink)
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my last name is Van **** which is a dutch name. Yea a bit of inspiration from early Em but yea i try not to completely rip his style
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Old 11-14-2010, 01:32 AM   #7 (permalink)
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its still not showing what ur name is! and the stars make be currious! lol.
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Old 11-14-2010, 10:27 AM   #8 (permalink)
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its still not showing what ur name is! and the stars make be currious! lol.
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Dyke.
That's what it is.
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Old 11-14-2010, 11:55 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Are you guys sure it's not Van Cock?
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Old 11-14-2010, 12:29 PM   #10 (permalink)
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D y k e doesnt rhyme.
and i cant think of any other words to rhyme in that line that WOULD be censored...
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