what do you think about these country song lyrics?

howard b · 08-03-2010, 01:59 PM

i called her up to let her know i wouldnt be home till bout ninee i was going after work to have a few drinks with those freinds of mine she said i love you ill see you real soon i told her if she needed me id be at hanks salloon (chorus) its nine o clock im still here with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer time sure flies when your haveing fun boys i have to go after this one i called her up bout a quarter till ten didnt even want to think bout the trouble i might be in i said i leaving heading out the door when ole joe shouted you got time for one more its eleven o clock im still here with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer time sure flies when your haveing fun lord please let her forgive me for this one well my phone rang a little after twelve i just knew i was gonna catch some hell she said my things are packed there by the door dont bother comeing home cause i dont live there no more its closeing time im still here theres no more music whiskey or beer time sure flies when your haveing fun sometimes i can be a stupid son of a gun

thomasracer56 · 08-03-2010, 03:24 PM

There's not much organization in your song(SPACING) and I can't tell the difference between your chorus and your verses.

What I interpret as your chorus: It's [insert time] I'm still here
with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer.
Time sure flies when you're having fun.
[Insert phrase] after/for this one.

Thomasracer

Landon · 08-04-2010, 09:15 AM

It would be easier to see if you spaced it out better, but it sounds quite enjoyable.

howard b · 08-04-2010, 04:43 PM

thanks i thought i had the right layout guess i was wrong i will try to fix it

thomasracer56 · 08-04-2010, 10:28 PM

otherwise, i like it.

08-03-2010, 01:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
howard b Groupie Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 2	what do you think about these country song lyrics? i called her up to let her know i wouldnt be home till bout ninee i was going after work to have a few drinks with those freinds of mine she said i love you ill see you real soon i told her if she needed me id be at hanks salloon (chorus) its nine o clock im still here with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer time sure flies when your haveing fun boys i have to go after this one i called her up bout a quarter till ten didnt even want to think bout the trouble i might be in i said i leaving heading out the door when ole joe shouted you got time for one more its eleven o clock im still here with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer time sure flies when your haveing fun lord please let her forgive me for this one well my phone rang a little after twelve i just knew i was gonna catch some hell she said my things are packed there by the door dont bother comeing home cause i dont live there no more its closeing time im still here theres no more music whiskey or beer time sure flies when your haveing fun sometimes i can be a stupid son of a gun

08-04-2010, 04:43 PM	#4 (permalink)
howard b Groupie Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 2	thanks i thought i had the right layout guess i was wrong i will try to fix it Last edited by howard b; 08-04-2010 at 04:53 PM.

08-03-2010, 03:24 PM	#2 (permalink)
thomasracer56 Still Crazy Nutso! Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: California, USA Posts: 148	There's not much organization in your song(SPACING) and I can't tell the difference between your chorus and your verses. What I interpret as your chorus: It's [insert time] I'm still here with the music the whiskey and ice cold beer. Time sure flies when you're having fun. [Insert phrase] after/for this one. Thomasracer

08-04-2010, 09:15 AM	#3 (permalink)
Landon Music Addict Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: The Emerald Isle Posts: 145	It would be easier to see if you spaced it out better, but it sounds quite enjoyable.

08-04-2010, 10:28 PM	#5 (permalink)
thomasracer56 Still Crazy Nutso! Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: California, USA Posts: 148	otherwise, i like it.