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Old 04-11-2010, 04:24 AM   #1 (permalink)
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hello i have been working on this song for a couple of weeks and i think that i have done all that i cn to make it as good as it can be.. however i am open to nwe ideas.
please be as honnst as you can be as i realy do need some good and bad points so that i am able to get better
so here goes

when the phone rings

Now that i am sat here all alone
just wishing you would come back home
i know inside that you were right
i just wish i could have stopped that fight
because....

when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does it matter i am in love with you

i looked back on the day
the day that you walked away
you walked straight out the door
and told me i wont see you anymore
NOW

when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does this matter i am in love with you

Baby now i sit and pray
just hoping you will come back my way
i just wanted you to stay
and tell me everything will be OK

because
when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does this matter i am in love with you
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Old 04-11-2010, 08:41 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 04-11-2010, 09:02 AM   #3 (permalink)
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hello i have been working on this song for a couple of weeks and i think that i have done all that i cn to make it as good as it can be.. however i am open to nwe ideas.
please be as honnst as you can be as i realy do need some good and bad points so that i am able to get better
so here goes

when the phone rings

Now that i am sat here all alone
just wishing you would come back home
i know inside that you were right
i just wish i could have stopped that fight
because....

when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does it matter i am in love with you


i looked back on the day
the day that you walked away
you walked straight out the door
and told me i wont see you anymore
NOW

when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does this matter i am in love with you

Baby now i sit and pray
just hoping you will come back my way
i just wanted you to stay
and tell me everything will be OK

because
when the phone rings i wish it was you
how can you hurt me the way that you do
was i just a simple screw
why does this matter i am in love with you


I imagine that sounded a lot better in your head.
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Old 04-11-2010, 09:06 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I imagine that sounded a lot better in your head.
I think it all sounded better in his head tbh.
Reality is such a cruel thing.
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