The Lyrical Saga Of SljSlj

Sljslj · 09-22-2010, 07:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ThePhanastasio

From the first of the most recent two songs, I really liked this line. It worked really well. There was a bit of stuff forced into rhyme schemes, but a lot of people are guilty of that, so that's okay. Ultimately, both were a little angst-filled for my taste, but definitely not bad at all.

That line was actually an idea I'd attempted to incorporate into a couple lyrics before with 0 success, but I think this time it turned out very well. The "angst-filled" feeling of these is completely intentional.

Quote:

And from the most recent song posted:

This bit was pretty strong, but I mostly just really liked the "I tire, I tire" at the end of that...verse, I presume?

Yeah I like that, too. I think I like it more than anything else in this song. And yes, it is a verse.

Sljslj · 09-23-2010, 05:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by adrienndion

Wow I felt like an idiot, this morning when I discovered masquerade mean what I thought it meant. Will change a part of the lyric sun when I find what the hell to go.

Why waste your time mocking something I said months ago? You're only making yourself look ridiculous, my friend.

Sljslj · 09-23-2010, 06:19 AM

ALL I EVER WANTED

Embedded deep in my cerebrum
Is this feeling that I'm
Indebted to my imagination
No feeling when I'm
Questioning my own existence
No healing and I'm
Abandoning all resistance

I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana
Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted

Hell is right there and I'm
Falling into it's arms of fire
It hurts so bad, but I'm
Sort of enjoying my own pyre

I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana
Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted

I don't know, haven't a clue, what I've got to do
To stop this feeling that I've been split in two
What the **** do I need to do
To lose myself and start anew?
What do I
What do I need to do?

Embedded deep in my cerebrum
Is this feeling that I'm
Indebted to my imagination
No feeling when I'm
Questioning my own existance
No healing and I'm
Abandoning all resistance

I've found something and it ain't what I expected
I've found my head, but my body still rejects it
'Cause self-appreciation isn't what I wanted
All I ever wanted is to bury myself inside my soul
All I ever wanted is to meet the reaper, pay his toll
All I ever wanted is to dig a six foot hole

I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana
Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted

Sljslj · 09-30-2010, 01:35 AM

I like to say something every thousand views, so... 4,000!

Sljslj · 09-30-2010, 02:13 PM

I want this to go farther, but I've absolutely no clue where to go with it.

JUST LEAVE ME

I need these drugs just to survive
These pills, they’re keeping me alive
Just leave me with my addictions

I take this bottle and I hide
One shot, two puts me back in line
Just leave me with my afflictions

Sljslj · 10-04-2010, 08:37 AM

Raindrops like shotgun shells
Pain stops, but I’m still in hell
Walk with death, I might as well
Lightning strikes and casts a spell

Sljslj · 10-06-2010, 03:38 AM

I still need another verse and maybe a bridge...

DEATHTRAP APPARITIONS

I’d hate very much to be ablaze in their hell
But loathe more an eternity in heaven
Avoidance of rational thought is deadly
Mass suicide in the name of seven, seven, seven

It doesn’t seem right that I’m looked down upon
For the acceptance of my observations
As they deny everything before their eyes
And glorify these deathtrap apparitions

I’m looking for any reason
To take the faithful seriously
Looking for some sort of treason
To explain how exactly I'm wrong

Sljslj · 10-07-2010, 01:28 AM

I wrote a song on my guitar for my lyric, "Even If It's No Good", which can be found on page 9 of this threead. I'm going to post it here today to give you an idea of what's coming later. I will record this, try my best to make it sound good, and post it here.

VERSE:
E|-0---3-3--5-5-x-7--5
A|-3---2-2--7-7-x-9--7
D|---------------------
G|--------------------- (x5)
B|---------------------
e|---------------------

E|-00330000330000
A|-33222233222233
D|-----------------
G|-----------------
B|-----------------
e|-----------------

CHORUS:
E|-5-5-555-6-3-5-5-444-3
A|-x-x-xxx--x-x-x-x-xxx-x
D|-7-7-777-8-5-7-7-666-5
G|------------------------ (x2)
B|------------------------
e|------------------------

BRIDGE (This part is tremelo-picked, except the power chords):
E|-----------------------
A|------------------55-7
D|------------------77-9
G|-8-7-8-10-11-10--77-9 (x2)
B|-----------------------
e|-----------------------

SOLO (Also tremello-picked, until the 0):
E|--------------------------------------------------------------------
A|--------------------------------------------------------------------
D|--------------------------------------------------------------------
G|-8-7-8-10-11-10-8-7-8-10-11-10-8-7-5-------5-7-----------------
B|----------------------------------------8-7-5----6--5--4----5-6-5-0
e|---------------------------------------------------5--4--3-5--------

E|------------------------------------5--5-5-5-555-6-3-5-5-444-3
A|------------------------------------x--x------------------------
D|------------------------------------7--7------------------------
G|-3-5b--3----0-5-7b-5----0-5-7b-5------------------------------
B|--------3-6b----------6b----------------------------------------
e|----------------------------------------------------------------

Sljslj · 10-08-2010, 04:30 PM

My first song, thus far... zSHARE - Even If Its No Good.wav

Sljslj · 10-09-2010, 12:18 PM

A bit of an update on the new song.... zSHARE - Even If It_s No Good _Most of guitar_ first verse vocals_.wav

09-23-2010, 06:19 AM	#133 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	ALL I EVER WANTED Embedded deep in my cerebrum Is this feeling that I'm Indebted to my imagination No feeling when I'm Questioning my own existence No healing and I'm Abandoning all resistance I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted Hell is right there and I'm Falling into it's arms of fire It hurts so bad, but I'm Sort of enjoying my own pyre I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted I don't know, haven't a clue, what I've got to do To stop this feeling that I've been split in two What the ** do I need to do To lose myself and start anew? What do I What do I need to do? Embedded deep in my cerebrum Is this feeling that I'm Indebted to my imagination No feeling when I'm Questioning my own existance No healing and I'm Abandoning all resistance I've found something and it ain't what I expected I've found my head, but my body still rejects it 'Cause self-appreciation isn't what I wanted All I ever wanted is to bury myself inside my soul All I ever wanted is to meet the reaper, pay his toll All I ever wanted is to dig a six foot hole I've found something, the polar opposite of nirvana Here I've found nothing, and that is exactly what I wanted __________________ MY LYRICS**

09-30-2010, 01:35 AM	#134 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	I like to say something every thousand views, so... 4,000! __________________ MY LYRICS

09-30-2010, 02:13 PM	#135 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	I want this to go farther, but I've absolutely no clue where to go with it. JUST LEAVE ME I need these drugs just to survive These pills, they’re keeping me alive Just leave me with my addictions I take this bottle and I hide One shot, two puts me back in line Just leave me with my afflictions __________________ MY LYRICS

10-04-2010, 08:37 AM	#136 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	Raindrops like shotgun shells Pain stops, but I’m still in hell Walk with death, I might as well Lightning strikes and casts a spell __________________ MY LYRICS Last edited by Sljslj; 10-05-2010 at 02:48 AM.

10-06-2010, 03:38 AM	#137 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	I still need another verse and maybe a bridge... DEATHTRAP APPARITIONS I’d hate very much to be ablaze in their hell But loathe more an eternity in heaven Avoidance of rational thought is deadly Mass suicide in the name of seven, seven, seven It doesn’t seem right that I’m looked down upon For the acceptance of my observations As they deny everything before their eyes And glorify these deathtrap apparitions I’m looking for any reason To take the faithful seriously Looking for some sort of treason To explain how exactly I'm wrong __________________ MY LYRICS

10-07-2010, 01:28 AM	#138 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	Even If It's No Good guitar tab. I wrote a song on my guitar for my lyric, "Even If It's No Good", which can be found on page 9 of this threead. I'm going to post it here today to give you an idea of what's coming later. I will record this, try my best to make it sound good, and post it here. VERSE: E\|-0---3-3--5-5-x-7--5 A\|-3---2-2--7-7-x-9--7 D\|--------------------- G\|--------------------- (x5) B\|--------------------- e\|--------------------- E\|-00330000330000 A\|-33222233222233 D\|----------------- G\|----------------- B\|----------------- e\|----------------- CHORUS: E\|-5-5-555-6-3-5-5-444-3 A\|-x-x-xxx--x-x-x-x-xxx-x D\|-7-7-777-8-5-7-7-666-5 G\|------------------------ (x2) B\|------------------------ e\|------------------------ BRIDGE (This part is tremelo-picked, except the power chords): E\|----------------------- A\|------------------55-7 D\|------------------77-9 G\|-8-7-8-10-11-10--77-9 (x2) B\|----------------------- e\|----------------------- SOLO (Also tremello-picked, until the 0): E\|-------------------------------------------------------------------- A\|-------------------------------------------------------------------- D\|-------------------------------------------------------------------- G\|-8-7-8-10-11-10-8-7-8-10-11-10-8-7-5-------5-7----------------- B\|----------------------------------------8-7-5----6--5--4----5-6-5-0 e\|---------------------------------------------------5--4--3-5-------- E\|------------------------------------5--5-5-5-555-6-3-5-5-444-3 A\|------------------------------------x--x------------------------ D\|------------------------------------7--7------------------------ G\|-3-5b--3----0-5-7b-5----0-5-7b-5------------------------------ B\|--------3-6b----------6b---------------------------------------- e\|---------------------------------------------------------------- __________________ MY LYRICS

10-08-2010, 04:30 PM	#139 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	My first song, thus far... zSHARE - Even If Its No Good.wav __________________ MY LYRICS

10-09-2010, 12:18 PM	#140 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	A bit of an update on the new song.... zSHARE - Even If It_s No Good _Most of guitar_ first verse vocals_.wav __________________ MY LYRICS