On A Sunny Day

On ASunnyDay · 02-13-2010, 02:19 PM

On A Sunny Day

On a sunny day, I know you are here,
But when skies turn to gray, I know you can't be near.
Things have been, pretty cloudy, ever since you left,
and I don't know how, this could've been the best,
Way to live, way to go, but I need you to know,

When I'm with you, everythings in place,
But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face,
when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain,
Why'd you have to go, go.
Say goodbye, say hello, but you had to go.

I'm all alone now, alone and missing you,
and now dear, its so clear, there's nothing I can do
To see that perfect face, looking down at me,
Haven't seen it since I don't know when,
But,

When I'm with you, everythings in place,
But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face,
when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain,
Why'd you have to go, go.
Say goodbye, say hello, but you had to go.

Now, oh now,
There's no more sunny days now, sunny days now,
I know you aren't still here,
Why'd you have to go, from me,
You're gone from me,
There's no time for me, now,
But

When I'm with you, everythings in place,
But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face,
when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain,
Why'd you have to go, go.
Don't say goodbye, please don't say goodbye,
Never say goodbye, always say hello,
Please don't ever go,
Please don't ever go .

On ASunnyDay · 02-13-2010, 02:20 PM

I can't pretned I'm happy, when you've been acting oh so sad,
I really have to say this even if it turns out bad,
And every dream with both of us, it must be make-believe,
Because I know if it were really real you wouldnt be with me,

I know I'm probbally kidding myself, how could I expect more,
You'll always be too good for me, what am I fighting for,
I know I shouldn't bother, It's knowen because it's true,
I've never been a fighter, but I'll fight if its for you .

Nothing's going right today, Its always going wrong,
Can't think of much to say to you, so then I spill it all,
Not sure I should've told you that, not sure of how I feel,
But now I'm so unsure of it, I can't tell you if its real .

I know I'm probbally kidding myself, how could I expect more,
You'll always be too good for me, what am I fighting for,
I know I shouldn't bother, It's knowen because it's true,
I've never been a fighter, but I'll fight if its for you .

On ASunnyDay · 02-13-2010, 02:22 PM

The things that at once hurt me,
Of now I'm not so sure,
The things I once thought of as pain,
I'm ready to endure,
This won't just be the easiest thing,
This giving up on you,
But now I know the time has come
Its something I must do,

The tears are streaming down my face,
Nothing holding them back, except,
The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy,
I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you,
I love you.

Foggy memories of moments we shared,
Coming to a closing, coming to an end,
But then you try our luck on out, seeing me again,
Do you really think I'm strong enough,
To face you in the end?

The tears are streaming down my face,
Nothing holding them back, except,
The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy,
I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you,
I love you.

All this time, I was looking for someone,
Just like you,
Maybe this is crazy,
We can't be right,
For eachother, tonight, so,
The tears are streaming, My heart is screaming,
For you, tonight,
And,

The tears are streaming down my face,
Nothing holding them back, except,
The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy,
I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you,
I love you...

On ASunnyDay · 02-13-2010, 02:24 PM

I know now, that you're far away,
There's nothing you can do, or you can say,
To make this go away, or to make it better,
As if better was a word that we could say,
Better's gone away,
Not a part of me today,

Now you're gone, back to yesterday,
I have found a way,
Lost in dreams, you're pulling at the seams,
Will it pull you back to me,
Finally, .

Things are cold, this is getting hard,
You're the teardrops that are falling from my heart,
Falling down on me,
Make it hard to breathe,
I'm starting to believe,
That you never wanted me, ..

Now you're gone, back to yesterday,
I have found a way,
Lost in dreams, you're pulling at the seams,
Will it pull you back to me,
Finally, .

Urban Hat€monger ? · 02-13-2010, 04:21 PM

Don't start multiple threads in here. Keep all your stuff in the same thread please.

t3hplatyz0rz · 02-13-2010, 05:19 PM

"On a Sunny Day"- Pretty decent. Music could make or break this. If you go over the top with those kind of lyrics, you're going to have some serious fail on your hands. On the other hand, they're not bad enough that if you've got a catchy melody, you don't turn it into a pop song, and you take it seriously, you could have something pretty decent on your hands.
Also, I want to know more about that character. What is the cause of their fight?

It's also pretty much the same for "My Fighter". I'm starting to get a sense that these are in the wrong order- "My Fighter" seems like a set-up for "On a Sunny Day" because the events in "My Fighter could lead to the events in "On a Sunny Day". If you've got a shared musical motif in both of them, I think that would be really cool.

After reading "Can This Get Better", I thought that it really seems like it's "My Fighter"-"On a Sunny Day"-"Can this Get Better". It's a flawed relationship, to a breakup, to a failed second chance.

OMG... after reading "Back to Me" it's obvious... these really should be grouped together. They're just so similar. And they tell a pretty linear story.
That's... actually pretty cool.
What inspired you to write this? Did you recently have a breakup?

BillyShears · 02-13-2010, 08:45 PM

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OMG... after reading "Back to Me" it's obvious... these really should be grouped together. They're just so similar. And they tell a pretty linear story.
That's... actually pretty cool.
What inspired you to write this? Did you recently have a breakup?

I smell a concept album.

t3hplatyz0rz · 02-13-2010, 09:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BillyShears

I smell a concept album.

I smell an obsession. Could be a concept album, but more likely it's a coincidence.

On ASunnyDay · 02-14-2010, 06:18 AM

Hahahaha, To be very honest, I never noticed that, they're not all even written about the same person. I kind of agree though, it's just not what I noticed. But to be honest, I never thought about it.

On ASunnyDay · 02-14-2010, 06:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by t3hplatyz0rz

"On a Sunny Day"- Pretty decent. Music could make or break this. If you go over the top with those kind of lyrics, you're going to have some serious fail on your hands. On the other hand, they're not bad enough that if you've got a catchy melody, you don't turn it into a pop song, and you take it seriously, you could have something pretty decent on your hands.

I can tell you right now, I'm not pop. I'm also not like, rock, if that's what you're thinking. I don't even have a genre yet. I just kind of write and see where it takes me. I sometimes have the music in my head when I'm writing, but others it comes to me months and months later.

But my big problem, is I don't play any instruments (other than the recorder, and kind of banjo.. Don't ask) But I have alot of friends who do play. Some who want me to team up with thier band for a few duo's.

Thanks for the advice

02-13-2010, 02:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
On ASunnyDay Groupie Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 28	On A Sunny Day Lyrics ♥ On A Sunny Day On a sunny day, I know you are here, But when skies turn to gray, I know you can't be near. Things have been, pretty cloudy, ever since you left, and I don't know how, this could've been the best, Way to live, way to go, but I need you to know, When I'm with you, everythings in place, But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face, when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain, Why'd you have to go, go. Say goodbye, say hello, but you had to go. I'm all alone now, alone and missing you, and now dear, its so clear, there's nothing I can do To see that perfect face, looking down at me, Haven't seen it since I don't know when, But, When I'm with you, everythings in place, But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face, when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain, Why'd you have to go, go. Say goodbye, say hello, but you had to go. Now, oh now, There's no more sunny days now, sunny days now, I know you aren't still here, Why'd you have to go, from me, You're gone from me, There's no time for me, now, But When I'm with you, everythings in place, But when you're gone all I dream of is your sweet and perfect face, when I'm All alone now, all I feel is pain, Why'd you have to go, go. Don't say goodbye, please don't say goodbye, Never say goodbye, always say hello, Please don't ever go, Please don't ever go . Last edited by On ASunnyDay; 02-21-2010 at 04:37 AM.

02-13-2010, 02:20 PM	#2 (permalink)
On ASunnyDay Groupie Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 28	My Fighter I can't pretned I'm happy, when you've been acting oh so sad, I really have to say this even if it turns out bad, And every dream with both of us, it must be make-believe, Because I know if it were really real you wouldnt be with me, I know I'm probbally kidding myself, how could I expect more, You'll always be too good for me, what am I fighting for, I know I shouldn't bother, It's knowen because it's true, I've never been a fighter, but I'll fight if its for you . Nothing's going right today, Its always going wrong, Can't think of much to say to you, so then I spill it all, Not sure I should've told you that, not sure of how I feel, But now I'm so unsure of it, I can't tell you if its real . I know I'm probbally kidding myself, how could I expect more, You'll always be too good for me, what am I fighting for, I know I shouldn't bother, It's knowen because it's true, I've never been a fighter, but I'll fight if its for you .

02-13-2010, 02:22 PM	#3 (permalink)
On ASunnyDay Groupie Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 28	Can This Get Better The things that at once hurt me, Of now I'm not so sure, The things I once thought of as pain, I'm ready to endure, This won't just be the easiest thing, This giving up on you, But now I know the time has come Its something I must do, The tears are streaming down my face, Nothing holding them back, except, The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy, I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you, I love you. Foggy memories of moments we shared, Coming to a closing, coming to an end, But then you try our luck on out, seeing me again, Do you really think I'm strong enough, To face you in the end? The tears are streaming down my face, Nothing holding them back, except, The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy, I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you, I love you. All this time, I was looking for someone, Just like you, Maybe this is crazy, We can't be right, For eachother, tonight, so, The tears are streaming, My heart is screaming, For you, tonight, And, The tears are streaming down my face, Nothing holding them back, except, The thought, that maybe, you might want me happy, I'll try for you, I need you, I want you, I miss you, I love you...

02-13-2010, 02:24 PM	#4 (permalink)
On ASunnyDay Groupie Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 28	Back To Me I know now, that you're far away, There's nothing you can do, or you can say, To make this go away, or to make it better, As if better was a word that we could say, Better's gone away, Not a part of me today, Now you're gone, back to yesterday, I have found a way, Lost in dreams, you're pulling at the seams, Will it pull you back to me, Finally, . Things are cold, this is getting hard, You're the teardrops that are falling from my heart, Falling down on me, Make it hard to breathe, I'm starting to believe, That you never wanted me, .. Now you're gone, back to yesterday, I have found a way, Lost in dreams, you're pulling at the seams, Will it pull you back to me, Finally, .

02-13-2010, 04:21 PM	#5 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	Don't start multiple threads in here. Keep all your stuff in the same thread please. __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

02-14-2010, 06:18 AM	#9 (permalink)
On ASunnyDay Groupie Join Date: Feb 2010 Posts: 28	Hahahaha, To be very honest, I never noticed that, they're not all even written about the same person. I kind of agree though, it's just not what I noticed. But to be honest, I never thought about it.