Playa
 

this is my newest song called playa i wrote it in study hall :D yay, please comment

Playa

Dont you look at me like you're wa wantin me when you got a girl thats dumb!
Why you flirting with me, when she obiously sees? she was stupid for thinking you #1

(chorus)
See i know you're a player
All these girls wanna hate ya
Im not a machine

You smile at me yeah you think you're so cute, when your other chicks accros the room.
You simile and wave,yeah just pretend you're just friends, but boy i. aint. a. fool.

(chorus)
See i know you're a player
All these girls wanna hate ya
Im not a machine

Im not falling for these tricks, dont think im gunna trip and fall for your lies
Ive seen you with 3 other girls and that one you just kissed yet you wanna take me out tonight

(chorus)
See i know you're a player
All these girls wanna hate ya
I'm not a machine

I know all those girls you been messin around with i dont want your STD's.
So boy quit with your chat i dont wanna talk about my cat, i dont wanna see your face, now leave.
©Written by Kaitlyn O'Connell February 4th, 2010 All Rights Reserved :beer:

Amazing

Absolutely amazing

You're too late love! Paranoid men hating is as old as the hills.

And stop playing hard to get when you know you'll end up shagging him just to put one over on the other 3.

Come on you can't argue with the genius of the last 2 lines

XD

Nah, but seriously, this mos def isn't the best song I've ever seen on here.
It's probably not the worst, a while back there was an EXTREMELY angry rap song along the same lines, except it was like 3 pages long. I think in terms of horrible-ness, that's the worst I've seen in my short time being on here.

Anyway, there are some technical problems with your song that make it somewhat hard for me to get. The first is that the chorus is three lines long, and while that's not the end of the world if you have a fourth, instrumental, line in there, or one of your lines takes up twice as long as the others, it can sound quite awkward if you don't have one of these things.

lolwut?

Aside from the fact that that is epic genius if you are a troll, I will assume you are just someone looking for criticism, and thus I will tell you that these lines make me want to shoot myself in the head.
Actually, that's going in my sig.

I have to admit that the metaphor for the word cat was pretty sneaky.
Just a shame she talks like a cunt for the rest of it.

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I'm pretty sure "You simile and wave" is a metaphor for something really deep but I just can't put my finger on it... maybe it's referring to poetry through sign language? Can a literary genius please help me out here?

Hope this helps;

http://www.entropiaforum.com/forums/...es/handjob.gif

I believe the wave is a subconcious attempt to comment on the quality of her own poetry through the eyes of her anti hero.

The last two lines were priceless. Absolutely priceless. I must've be amused for roughly 5minutes straight. Champ.