computer head

stevevw · 01-30-2010, 08:14 PM

this is a song i started to write about my crashed computer.
verse 1
ive got a computer in my room but its all in pieces.
with wires hanging everywhere cause theres a problem with the hard drive.
that means i cant go on the net and surf the world wide web
gotta do things face to face and be a human being instead.

chorus
computers in my brain, computers in my head
can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead.
can a computer feel pain just like me and you
i would'nt be surprised if one of these days
i become a computer to.
computer head
computer head
computer head

verese 2
computers are everywhere telling us what to do
exchanging information on this planet internet.
where wired to the system and there taking control
just like a hidden virus infiltrating our souls.

chorus
computers in my brain, computers in my head
can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead.
can a computer feel pain just like me and you
i would'nt be surprised if one of these days
you become a computer to.
computer head
computer head
computer head

bridge ?
computers are living in my head and there telling me what to do
computers are popping up everywhere controlling me and you
i cant do anything without a computer getting in my way
will a computer become a human being one day.

verse 3
ive got a computer in my room but its all in pieces.
with wires hanging everywhere cause theres a problem with the hard drive. that means i cant go on the net and surf the world wide web
gotta do things face to face and be a human being instead.

chorus computers in my brain, computers in my head
can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead.
can a computer feel pain just like me and you
i would'nt be surprised if one of these days
i become a computer to.
computer head
computer head
computer head

Arya Stark · 01-30-2010, 08:40 PM

I think since you say "computer(s)" so much, you should try and find other ways to say it.
Maybe make a metaphor to computers or something.
And also, if you're going to say it so much, I wouldn't put it in the title.

I like the idea. Keep writing.

stevevw · 02-01-2010, 09:08 PM

yeh thanks i guess i got carried away with the idea. another friend said he did'nt like the idea of even mentioning the word computer. good idea to use other names for computer i will work on it. thanks for the feed back.

Arya Stark · 02-01-2010, 09:15 PM

Yeah computer is a weird word to use.
It's like I won't ever use "text message" in a poem, so I'm trying to find ways I can hint at it without saying it so bluntly, you know what I mean?

01-30-2010, 08:14 PM	#1 (permalink)
stevevw Groupie Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 5	computer head this is a song i started to write about my crashed computer. verse 1 ive got a computer in my room but its all in pieces. with wires hanging everywhere cause theres a problem with the hard drive. that means i cant go on the net and surf the world wide web gotta do things face to face and be a human being instead. chorus computers in my brain, computers in my head can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead. can a computer feel pain just like me and you i would'nt be surprised if one of these days i become a computer to. computer head computer head computer head verese 2 computers are everywhere telling us what to do exchanging information on this planet internet. where wired to the system and there taking control just like a hidden virus infiltrating our souls. chorus computers in my brain, computers in my head can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead. can a computer feel pain just like me and you i would'nt be surprised if one of these days you become a computer to. computer head computer head computer head bridge ? computers are living in my head and there telling me what to do computers are popping up everywhere controlling me and you i cant do anything without a computer getting in my way will a computer become a human being one day. verse 3 ive got a computer in my room but its all in pieces. with wires hanging everywhere cause theres a problem with the hard drive. that means i cant go on the net and surf the world wide web gotta do things face to face and be a human being instead. chorus computers in my brain, computers in my head can a computer bring me back to life when i'm dead. can a computer feel pain just like me and you i would'nt be surprised if one of these days i become a computer to. computer head computer head computer head

02-01-2010, 09:08 PM	#3 (permalink)
stevevw Groupie Join Date: May 2008 Posts: 5	yeh thanks i guess i got carried away with the idea. another friend said he did'nt like the idea of even mentioning the word computer. good idea to use other names for computer i will work on it. thanks for the feed back.