I think that inside jokes, personal symbols, etc, are extremely good. I love them.
Just don't expect anybody to get them.
So, as a poem from you to Savannah, it's probably pretty good. But from you to a random reader, it's... well... I just don't get it. And I'm pretty sure that everybody else reading this feels the same way.
Because of that, I really can't offer an accurate review, but I'll try.
Quote:
You’re the cold to my hot and the hot to my cold,
Regardless of what I have been told.
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This line in particular is very cliche. I think that, while being cliche can help get your point across, there are better ways to do it.
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