This Poem Is Probably Going To Go Over Your Head..

[bogey_j]

but here goes. it's lyrics for an experimental song i'm writing. it's called 'Do fish dream?'
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My friend is a fish
he lives in my room.
his fin is a cloud.
he sees me when I sleep

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[Schizotypic]

Is this a poem or is it a riddle?

[mr dave]

people are going to think you're singing about this

[bogey_j]

Originally Posted by mr dave

people are going to think you're singing about this

then they would be wrong

[Janszoon]

I think the song is about tennis.

[mr dave]

Originally Posted by bogey_j

then they would be wrong

wrong or not it's the audience and not the artist that determines what creations are really about.

[bogey_j]

Originally Posted by mr dave

wrong or not it's the audience and not the artist that determines what creations are really about.

I understand that, but you must be some jesus freak if the only thing you got from the lyrics was jesus

[Janszoon]

So what is it about?

[mr dave]

Originally Posted by bogey_j

I understand that, but you must be some jesus freak if the only thing you got from the lyrics was jesus

so... why try to make it seem deep in the first place if it's meant to be plainly descriptive?

[What'sNext?]

In my opinion, it's only so-so, but your writing will get better in time. Maybe next time you could think of something a little more...meaningful. But don't get me wrong! This has great potential. Lady GaGa is huge, and she doesn't even use realy words. She just goes rahrahrahohgagablahlablah so your already a step ahead of her!