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02-10-2010, 02:22 PM | #21 (permalink) |
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YOU MUST READ THE DESCRIPTION BEFORE YOU READ THE SONG (or you may believe I'm an idiot)
Here's one I'd like some input on! It's a joke song making fun of the people who right about the government in their songs whether or not they know what they're talking about. I think it needs more substance. Lyrical suggestions are appreciated. I'm Making a Political Statement though I don't understand it I'm Making a Political Statement seems this genre demands it I don't really know what to think or say so I'll yell that the government should just go away I'm Making a Political Statement about war and taxes and stuff I'm Making a Political Statement It doesn't matter if you've had enough Who cares what they stand for? It's cool to dislike them let's knock down their doors! we rebels resent them
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02-10-2010, 07:31 PM | #23 (permalink) | |
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I think that, once again, your annotations were completely pointless. Anybody could tell that it was making fun of obligatory political shouts. It's pretty much every third word which proves it.
I think you messed up on one line by going a little bit overboard. "I may be mis-informed but our leaders suck" doesn't really work because it's too blatant. I think that it was very good. I know how those songs are... I've written several of them. I luv these short and conceptual songs. The reason is you really can't go wrong with them. Good job!
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03-04-2010, 06:20 PM | #30 (permalink) |
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What's this you say? It's an exercise in futility I practice twice a week to stay in shape I'm trying to show I'm a human though not important in their eyes I'm equal to them not another meaningless face They keep me around 'cause they know I'm good for a joke or two they try to hide who they really are but the masks come off and the abuse comes off once they've had a few They act satisfied with their lives but they know what they've got isn't where it lies they're always tryin' to hide their sighs but I can tell they're aware that they're on the outside their wealth and oppurtunity came at a cost and while we know where we\re going they're hopelessly lost when we've grown older children riding on our shoulders they'll feel weighed down in this world, carrying the weight of a boulder I hate them but it should be pity that I'm feeling because when they're youth is over the real world will have them reeling
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