New song I wrote.

littleknowitall · 01-21-2010, 04:41 AM

Tell me what you think. Was trying to write like 'the Jam' ended out sounding far too major I think. I haven't titled it, suggest one if you like.

Verse 1
Living in your digital fortress
With nothing left for you to write about
And you don’t care how your money comes
Just as long as it shows up at your door

D major, C# minor7th, A major, F#5

Pre-chorus 1
The Dogs waiter
For your dirty dinner
Mind intoxicated with
getting thinner
Just another day for you to
Write away
Motivate yourself to make it through the day and…

Bminor7th, E major

Chorus
Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on
Like a cannon firing at the sun
Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on
Like a cannon firing at the sun

A major, Bminor7th, G major, D major

Verse 2
Your minds caught in a traffic jam
Staring straight at the headlights
can’t complain, living the easy life
Never walking outside of your house,

Pre-chorus 2
Waiting for the day that you moneys out
just another weekend you can laugh about
another lonely day for you to write away
motivate yourself and make it through the day and…

Chorus
Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on
like a cannon firing at the sun
Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on
Like a cannon firing at the sun

I recorded it for my drummer to get the idea before we practice, I'm no singer so it was just to get an idea of it. I'm not publicizing a singer/songwriter career here. REALLY not. But that's the melody I had in mind....But in tune.

01-21-2010, 04:41 AM	#1 (permalink)
littleknowitall Pow! Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 1,673	New song I wrote. Tell me what you think. Was trying to write like 'the Jam' ended out sounding far too major I think. I haven't titled it, suggest one if you like. Verse 1 Living in your digital fortress With nothing left for you to write about And you don’t care how your money comes Just as long as it shows up at your door D major, C# minor7th, A major, F#5 Pre-chorus 1 The Dogs waiter For your dirty dinner Mind intoxicated with getting thinner Just another day for you to Write away Motivate yourself to make it through the day and… Bminor7th, E major Chorus Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on Like a cannon firing at the sun Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on Like a cannon firing at the sun A major, Bminor7th, G major, D major Verse 2 Your minds caught in a traffic jam Staring straight at the headlights can’t complain, living the easy life Never walking outside of your house, Pre-chorus 2 Waiting for the day that you moneys out just another weekend you can laugh about another lonely day for you to write away motivate yourself and make it through the day and… Chorus Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on like a cannon firing at the sun Oh how it must hurt to have to carry on and on Like a cannon firing at the sun I recorded it for my drummer to get the idea before we practice, I'm no singer so it was just to get an idea of it. I'm not publicizing a singer/songwriter career here. REALLY not. But that's the melody I had in mind....But in tune.

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