My first songs!! What do you think? (lyrics, Queen, artist)

[yvi_poison]

Hello everybody, I´m new here, and I just started writing some what i hopefully can be songs, Id like your honest opinion, they are not 100% finished yet, Ive written around 20 songs now, 2 of my songs:

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Queen of bordeaux


Somewhere between her glass and mind
Driving questions to dead points
Could it been her heart playing her blind
Listening to some song with unkind words
the bottle is calling her back
her empty dreams so black

She is the queen of bordeaux
She is the queen of bordeaux
Her teeth tells the truth
Will she be breathing again
She is lonely She is lonely
Fill the gap with the blood
that poison this beauty
She will be the queen
of her destiny

Asking if her day has been okay
Watching her hands shaking
Hinding her fear behind that smile
Would somebody worship her
Listening to her weeping through the wine
the life is calling her back
her empty heart so black

She is the queen of bordeaux
She is the queen of empty glasses
and broken hearts



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Wishing on something

I never thought there was so many stars upon us
shining for the one who is waiting
I never thought Id have a star shooting for me
Where did you hide, did you not want to be bounded
Floating up around and thinking
You must have heard me hinting

Wishing for a fantasy with no end
Wishing for the magic to be mine
I´ve never seen a heart so fine.
There is only you
To take me away
Wanting for someone who makes me feel like you do.
To think I am one of the few

I wanted to tell you that night
But your arms wouldn´t let me wait
That there is nobody like you
I never thought Id be in this state
devoting an star falling down
You must have heard me praying, saying.

Wishing for a fantasy with no end
Wishing for the dream to be mine
I´ve never seen a heart as divine.
There will be only you
To take me away
Wishing on something like you
To take me with the storm

Wishing on a dream to live by
Through the hurting
To always be mine
Somewhere you will always be waiting