Paranoid Ghost Songs

musiclover96 · 01-18-2010, 09:00 AM

Hey, this is my first ever song. Please rate it.

LIES!

Paranoid that's what you are,
Annoyed with everone, anyone,
Who says your wrong, (repeated, louder)
And all they say are...

LIES, everythings
LIES,all we hear are
LIES,we're fed by
LIES, all we know are...

Paranoid, you're really weird,
They are so very feared,
By everyone you know, (Repeated, louder)
And all they say are...

LIES, everythings
LIES,all we hear are
LIES,we're fed by
LIES, all we know are...

Paranoid, so am I,
Pursued by the Goverment,
All we do is run for them,(Repeated, louder)
And all they say are...

LIES, everythings
LIES,all we hear are
LIES,we're fed by
LIES, all we know are
LIES!

Thanks!

Shoe · 01-18-2010, 08:04 PM

Way too generic man I'm sorry. Like seriously this is just blind, angsty, unoriginal writing. Keep at it though. It takes practice.
Best of luck.

Mick · 01-19-2010, 12:14 AM

I've found a lot of lyrics by themselves like this sound a bit corny, but if their put to the right music it can sound alright.

musiclover96 · 01-20-2010, 01:41 AM

Thanks for both your comments, I'll keep trying.

BillyShears · 01-20-2010, 03:11 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by musiclover96

Thanks for both your comments, I'll keep trying.

Keep on Keepin' on.

musiclover96 · 05-19-2010, 02:40 PM

Hey, this is my second song, any comments?

God, A.K.A, Creep

CHORUS
Jealous,
Racist,
Sexist,
Facist.

Egotist,
Homophobic,
that’s,
You.

Dear God, get lost,
You egotistical little creep.
Your racist views,
Are annoying me.

Oh my dear God,
I hate you weirdo.
I wish you go off,
And die somewhere.

CHORUS

I hate your way,
I wish you would,
Just go and get,
LOST!

Leave me alone,
Please you racist.
You creepy homophob,
Go bother someone else.

CHORUS

*2

Sljslj · 05-19-2010, 02:47 PM

I like it. What genre is it?

musiclover96 · 05-19-2010, 02:54 PM

Sorry, repeat.

musiclover96 · 05-19-2010, 02:56 PM

It's sort of punk. Its like a rant against religion.

musiclover96 · 05-19-2010, 03:07 PM

Another song made by me.

Life In Hell

Chorus
Go on then,
Kill me,
Let me fly,
Away from you.

Life in hell is nice,
Compared to living with you.
I want to leave you,
Just run away from you.

Chorus

Why do you torture me so,
Burn my heart away?
Pull my love out me,
Why do you do this?

Do you think it’s funny,
To see pain in my face?
Do you find amusement,
In the torture?

Chorus

Life in Hell,
Is rather nice.
*3

01-18-2010, 09:00 AM	#1 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	Paranoid Ghost Songs Hey, this is my first ever song. Please rate it. LIES! Paranoid that's what you are, Annoyed with everone, anyone, Who says your wrong, (repeated, louder) And all they say are... LIES, everythings LIES,all we hear are LIES,we're fed by LIES, all we know are... Paranoid, you're really weird, They are so very feared, By everyone you know, (Repeated, louder) And all they say are... LIES, everythings LIES,all we hear are LIES,we're fed by LIES, all we know are... Paranoid, so am I, Pursued by the Goverment, All we do is run for them,(Repeated, louder) And all they say are... LIES, everythings LIES,all we hear are LIES,we're fed by LIES, all we know are LIES! Thanks! __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael

01-19-2010, 12:14 AM	#3 (permalink)
Mick Antidisestablishmentarian Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Sydney, Australia Posts: 86	I've found a lot of lyrics by themselves like this sound a bit corny, but if their put to the right music it can sound alright. __________________ "I don't know anything about music. In my line you don't have to." - Elvis Presley

01-20-2010, 01:41 AM	#4 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	Thanks for both your comments, I'll keep trying. __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael

05-19-2010, 02:40 PM	#6 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	Song: God, A.K.A, Creep Hey, this is my second song, any comments? God, A.K.A, Creep CHORUS Jealous, Racist, Sexist, Facist. Egotist, Homophobic, that’s, You. Dear God, get lost, You egotistical little creep. Your racist views, Are annoying me. Oh my dear God, I hate you weirdo. I wish you go off, And die somewhere. CHORUS I hate your way, I wish you would, Just go and get, LOST! Leave me alone, Please you racist. You creepy homophob, Go bother someone else. CHORUS *2 __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael

05-19-2010, 02:54 PM	#8 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	Sorry, repeat. __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael Last edited by musiclover96; 05-19-2010 at 03:03 PM. Reason: Edit

05-19-2010, 02:47 PM	#7 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	I like it. What genre is it?

05-19-2010, 02:56 PM	#9 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	It's sort of punk. Its like a rant against religion. __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael

05-19-2010, 03:07 PM	#10 (permalink)
musiclover96 Groupie Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 9	Song: Life in Hell Another song made by me. Life In Hell Chorus Go on then, Kill me, Let me fly, Away from you. Life in hell is nice, Compared to living with you. I want to leave you, Just run away from you. Chorus Why do you torture me so, Burn my heart away? Pull my love out me, Why do you do this? Do you think it’s funny, To see pain in my face? Do you find amusement, In the torture? Chorus Life in Hell, Is rather nice. *3 __________________ Looking for these! PM me for any info, if you can play any instrument. I'm into rock, indie, alternative, punk and british, including: Muse, The Pigeon Detectives, AFI, Placebo, Green Day, Manchester Orchestra, My Chemical Romance and Oasis. Check out my music taste: http://www.last.fm/user/Deathstrokehael